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Some people believe that zoos serve useful functions. Other people believe that it is cruel and wrong to confine in zoos. Tell which point of view you agree with and explain why, using specific and reasons.

Some people believe that zoos serve useful functions. Other people believe that it is cruel and wrong to confine in zoos. Tell which point of view you agree with and explain why, using specific and reasons. g51BD
Zoos is one of the most attractive amusements in cities, which people are willing to visit. The benefits and disadvantages of zoos has been a hot topic of debate for years. S people say that zoos are a must for cities, while others believe that it is not fair to keep animals in cages for our own enjoyment. Although it is a highly controversial topic, I believe that the advantages of zoos overweight their disadvantages. Zoos can be a good place to educate kids about animals’life. Also, zoos play a significant role in preserving endanger species from being extinct. The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea lies in the fact that zoos are a good source of education, especially for kids. Most schools arrange a field trip to zoo for their students, because in zoos they can show them the real animal while they are talking about its anatomy, habitat, diet and so on. There is no denying the fact that when students can see the real animal in front of them, they will learn and remember all those information better. Therefore, zoos are a good educational place, which can broaden kids knowledge of animals and the wild life. Another subtle point that we should deem is the important and undeniable role of zoos in protecting endanger species. In most of main zoos, such New York zoo, they keep and protect endanger animals such as panda, some type of lion and so on. They take a good care of them and help them to reproduce. For example, panda is an endanger species. Atlanta zoo has two pandas, a male and a female. Last year, I heard that those pandas had a baby. The news said that zookeepers took a good maternity care of the mama panda. Without them the chance of those pandas for having a baby was near zero. This example shows that zoos are not just a type of attraction, they serve a crucial role in protecting animals. All in all, due to the aforementioned arguments explored in the previous statements, I believe that zoos are essential. A glimpse look at their educational and protective function can confirms my claim.
Zoos is one of the most attractive amusements in cities, which
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people
are willing to visit. The benefits and disadvantages of zoos has been a hot topic of debate for years. S
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people
say that zoos are a
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must
for cities, while others believe that it is not
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fair
to
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keep
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animals
in cages for our
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own
enjoyment. Although it is a
highly
controversial topic, I believe that the advantages of zoos overweight their disadvantages. Zoos can be a
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good
place to educate kids about animals’life.
Also
, zoos play a significant role in preserving
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endanger
species from being extinct.

The foremost reason why I am supporting this
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idea
lies in the fact that zoos are a
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good
source of education,
especially
for kids. Most schools arrange a field trip to zoo for their students,
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because
in zoos they can
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show
them the real
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animal
while they are talking about its anatomy, habitat, diet and
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so
on. There is no denying the fact that when students can
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see
the real
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animal
in front of them, they will learn and remember all
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those information
better.
Therefore
, zoos are a
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good
educational place, which can broaden kids knowledge of
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animals
and the wild life.

Another subtle point that we should deem is the
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important
and undeniable role of zoos in protecting
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endanger
species. In most of main zoos, such New York zoo, they
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keep
and protect
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endanger
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animals
such as panda,
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some
type of lion and
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so
on. They take a
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good
care of them and
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help
them to reproduce.
For example
, panda is an
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endanger
species. Atlanta zoo has two pandas, a male and a female. Last year, I heard that those pandas had a baby. The news said that zookeepers took a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
maternity care of the
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mama
panda. Without them the chance of those pandas for having a baby was near zero. This example
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shows
that zoos are not
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just
a type of attraction, they serve a crucial role in protecting animals.

All in all, due to the aforementioned arguments explored in the previous statements, I believe that zoos are essential. A glimpse look at their educational and protective function can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "confirm"
confirms
my claim.

IELTS essay Some people believe that zoos serve useful functions. Other people believe that it is cruel and wrong to confine in zoos. Tell which point of view you agree with and explain why, using specific and reasons.

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