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Some people believe that we have too many choices

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It is often claimed that modern life presents people with an overwhelming number of choices. I completely agree with this, and tend to think that the Internet and globalisation are the two major factors involved. It is undeniable that the Internet has led to a dramatic expansion in the number of choices that are available to us. The number of online media options, for instance, is now almost endless. There are countless websites offering entertainment, news, videos, on-demand TV and music streaming, many of which are free. I would argue that this abundance of media leads to confusion on the part of the average user, as we have to make so many decisions about the content that we consume. For example, people used to have just four TV channels in the 90s, whereas now we have access to thousands of films and series through services like Netflix. Alongside the influence of the Internet, globalisation is making the world smaller and compounding this problem of too much choice. Cheap international flights have made overseas travel possible for millions of people, but this also means that we are faced with a world of options when deciding where to go on holiday or even where to live. We no longer have the limited but simple travel choices of our grandparents’ generation. The same is true if we look at the increasing tendency for young people to study abroad. While the opportunity for overseas study seems appealing, many students are confused about where to go and which path to take. In conclusion, thanks to online services and globalisation, we are faced with a huge number of options in most areas of life nowadays. I strongly believe that this is often more bewildering than beneficial as being overwhelmed with options could make people confused as to what to do in life.
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of our grandparents’ generation. The same is true if we look at the increasing tendency for young
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to study abroad. While the opportunity for overseas study seems appealing,
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IELTS essay Some people believe that we have too many choices

Essay
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4 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
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