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some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to youngchildern. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to youngchildern. To what extant eaG7
It is argued that voluntary services should be manodatory part of secondary school curriculam. I strongly agree wity this statement, due to learn new skills and opportunities. First of all, students learn through practical and this voluntary work will help him to improving their soft skills and gaining experience. In other word, after school instead of watching television they can work for any society as a voluntary. In this way pupil learn new skills and improve their communication skills as well as acquire more new knowledge. Fir example, Allied house school system has started this wirk, and their student have more knowledge and skills than other scjools, also after school system they easily get admission in colleges because of voluntary work. So, voluntary services should be compulsary in high school. Moreover, student got more opportunities through this work, they easily got job if they did voluntary work in school. For example, mostly students have same grade in school and college life. So, companies look toward studebt who did extra voluntary work with study. In conclusion, voluntary services should be manodatory in school curriculam because of getting skills and opportunities.
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manodatory
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curriculam
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this statement, due to learn new
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skills
and opportunities.

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students
learn through practical and this
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voluntary
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work
will
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help
him to improving their soft
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skills
and gaining experience. In other word, after
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school
instead
of watching television they can
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work
for any society as a
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voluntary
. In this way pupil learn new
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skills
and
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improve
their communication
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skills
as well
as acquire more new knowledge. Fir example, Allied
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house
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school
system has
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started
this
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, and their
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have more knowledge and
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skills
than other
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scjools
,
also
after
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school
system they
easily
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get
admission in colleges
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voluntary
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work
.
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,
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compulsary
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,
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student
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got
more opportunities through this
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work
, they
easily
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got
job if they did
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voluntary
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work
in
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,
mostly
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students
have same grade in
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school
and college life.
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,
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companies
look toward
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studebt
who did extra
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voluntary
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work
with study.

In conclusion
,
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services should be
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manodatory
in
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school
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curriculam
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because
of getting
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skills
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IELTS essay some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to youngchildern. To what extant

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