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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsary part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is natural that school curricula will alter and develop over time. At present, the idea that there should be some kind of community-based programme integrated in to school time has been suggested. This could bring about a number of clear advantages, but not without a few potential issues. Working for one’s local community is without doubt a valuable use of time. If this were part of high school programmes, children and teenagers would learn the value of mutual care and of contributing to the area in which they were born and grew up. It would be grounding for those of higher privilege, and would add diversity to overly-academic schedules, which have come in for criticism in recent times for not being practical enough. However, there are those who will argue that school time should be spent on more traditional subjects. It is true that mathematics and language skills are integral to a child’s ability to progress in life beyond school, and that a balance of scientific and artistic subjects has always served to enable success in the world of work. It could be said that interference in this balance is unnecessary, and that community-based work should be allocated outside of school time under parental guidance. In conclusion, I am inclined neither to agree nor disagree to any particular extent. This is principally because, while I appreciate the need for high school children to contribute to society outside of their schools, I am not sure if this should be prioritised above or alongside academic pursuits.
It is natural that
school
curricula will alter and develop over
time
. At present, the
idea
that there should be
some
kind of community-based
programme
integrated in to
school
time
has
been suggested
. This could bring about a number of
clear
advantages,
but
not without a few potential issues.

Working for one’s local community is without doubt a valuable
use
of
time
. If this were part of high
school
programmes
, children and
teenagers
would learn the value of mutual care and of contributing to the area in which they
were born
and grew up. It would be grounding for those of higher privilege, and would
add
diversity to
overly
-academic schedules, which have
come
in for criticism in recent
times
for not being practical
enough
.

However
, there are those who will argue that
school
time
should
be spent
on more traditional subjects. It is true that mathematics and language
skills
are integral to a child’s ability to progress in life beyond
school
, and that a balance of scientific and artistic subjects has always served to enable success in the world of work. It could
be said
that interference in this balance is unnecessary, and that community-based work should
be allocated
outside of
school
time
under parental guidance.

In conclusion
, I
am inclined
neither to
agree
nor disagree to any particular extent. This is
principally
because
, while I appreciate the need for high
school
children to contribute to society
outside of
their
schools
, I am not sure if this should be
prioritised
above or alongside academic pursuits.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsary part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).

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