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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Some People believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 26
A few group accept that there ought to fixed disciplines for each type of offence, whereas, other people claim that the situations of an offence, and the inspiration of carrying out it, have to consistently be considered when settling on discipline. This essay will discuss both views in detail. On the one hand, nowadays, graph of wrongdoing is soaring on the globe, so it is mandatory to punished criminals. Number of people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of wrongdoing. For example, if one did the murder with intension of getting money from individual, or getting revenge of their personal matters then considering the motivation behind doing this, one can give punishment such as send murderer behind the rods of jail, or hanging. In this condition it is fair to have fixed set of rules and regulation of punishment. Although, it is also beneficial for any country to have fixed sets of punishments for some kind of crime such as for doing rape, any sexual harassment, blackmailing, breaches the constitutional rules, terrorism, smuggling etc. On the other hand, what happen if individual kill human accidently? Considering one scenario in which some antisocial gang doing some illegal activities to one person such as hitting them with hockey, robbing them in the edge of knives, consequently, during self-defence person accidently may kill criminal or injured them badly. In this case logically person is innocent, so that, in this situation court should not give the punishment without taking note about condition. Subsequently, from this view it is not right to have fixed punishments for each crime. In conclusion, and in my opinion, I think it is better to have fixed punishments for specifics types of crime but not for all. In addition, court ought to consider every aspects of doing crime such as intension, motivation and many more traits.
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accept that there ought to
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fixed
disciplines for each type of
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offence
, whereas, other
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people
claim that the situations of an
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offence
, and the inspiration of carrying out it,
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have to
consistently
be considered
when settling on discipline. This essay will discuss both views in detail.

On the one hand, nowadays, graph of wrongdoing is soaring on the globe,
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so
it is mandatory to punished criminals. Number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that there should be
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fixed
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punishments
for each type of wrongdoing.
For example
, if one did the murder with
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intension
of getting money from individual, or getting revenge of their personal matters then considering the motivation behind
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doing
this, one can give
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punishment
such as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
murderer behind the rods of jail, or hanging. In this condition it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
to have
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fixed
set of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulation of
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punishment
. Although, it is
also
beneficial for any country to have
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fixed
sets of
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punishments
for
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some
kind of crime such as for
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doing
rape, any sexual harassment, blackmailing, breaches the constitutional
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rules
, terrorism, smuggling etc.

On the other hand
, what happen if individual kill human
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accidently
? Considering one scenario in which
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some
antisocial gang
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doing
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some
illegal activities to one person such as hitting them with hockey, robbing them in the edge of knives,
consequently
, during
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self-defence
person
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accidently
may kill criminal or injured them
badly
.
In this case
logically
person is innocent,
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so
that, in this situation court should not give the
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punishment
without taking note about condition.
Subsequently
, from this view it is not right to have
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fixed
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punishments
for each crime.

In conclusion
, and in my opinion, I
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think
it is better to have
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fixed
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punishments
for specifics types of crime
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but
not for all.
In addition
, court ought to consider every
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aspects
of
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doing
crime such as
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intension
, motivation and
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many
more traits.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

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