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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.15

It is argued that each kind of criminal problems should have fixed different penalties. However, in my opinion, I would argue that criminal conviction should be considered through the form of the crimes as well as the circumstances and the motive of each crime. On the one hand, a different type of crimes should have a different type of punishments. Each crime can be completely divided into many kinds of small crime and each of them can happen in many ways that we cannot expect. Furthermore, sentencing a crime should also be dependent on the extent of its crime whether it is severity or light. For example, a murder might totally be sentenced to death due to killing citizens, but a thief just can be convicted to 1-year prison. Thus, each fixed punishment for each crime should be applied widely in society. On the other hand, deciding on the punishment should have considered the situations of the crime to explore why the criminal commit the crime and to understand the motives and the decisions of normal criminal. Many people because they do not have enough money to cure their family members such as mother or father, they must have committed the crime. Besides, there are also many people with unfairness that means they are put into crime circumstances by the criminals. For instance, a youngster was defrauded by a criminal because he transported drug and the result is that he had just been convicted 3 months prison. Thus, the circumstances and the motive, the decisions of each crime should be considered before sentencing the punishments. In conclusion, although many people think that every crime should have each type of fixed punishments, I totally believe that the situations, the decisions and the motives of each criminal should be considered when giving punishments for criminals
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different
type of
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crimes
should have a
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different
type of
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punishments
. Each
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crime
can be completely divided into
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kinds of
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small
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crime
and each of them can happen in
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ways that we cannot
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expect
.
Furthermore
, sentencing a
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crime
should
also
be dependent on the extent of its
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crime
whether it is severity or light.
For example
, a murder might
totally
be sentenced
to death due to killing citizens,
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but
a thief
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just
can
be convicted
to 1-year prison.
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, each
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fixed
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punishment
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be applied
widely
in society.

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, deciding on the
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should have
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considered
the situations of the
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crime
to explore why the
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criminal
commit the
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crime
and to understand the
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motives
and the decisions of normal
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criminal
.
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people
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they do not have
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enough
money to cure their family members such as mother or father, they
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must
have committed the
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crime
.
Besides
, there are
also
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many
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people
with unfairness that means they
are put
into
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crime
circumstances by the
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criminals
.
For instance
, a youngster
was defrauded
by a
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criminal
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because
he transported drug and the result is that he had
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just
been convicted
3 months prison.
Thus
, the circumstances and the
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motive
, the decisions of each
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crime
should be
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considered
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before
sentencing the punishments.

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people
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think
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crime
should have each type of
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fixed
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punishments
, I
totally
believe that the situations, the decisions and the
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motives
of each
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criminal
should be
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considered
when giving
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punishments
for
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criminals
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

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