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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.9

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 9
Some people argue whether criminals must always subject to fixed punishment for certain crimes, or whether situations for committing the crime should be taken into account before inflicting punishment. This essay will examine both sides of the argument and outline my opinion. On the one hand, criminal activities have reduced significantly over the centuries in the history of humankind. Fixed punishments like the death penalty, life imprisonment for drug trafficking deter an offender from such heinous crimes. The ruthlessness of such harsh punishments ensured safety and security in the society. For instance, according to a publication on criminal justice from the C. I. A, Saudi Arabia has been consistently ranked top regarding achieving a low-crime index due to its aggressive law for enforcing fixed punishments for designated crimes. Nevertheless, the main objective of the law and order is to protect the innocents and punish the wrong doers. The fixed punishment often contradicts with the fundamental objective of the civil society. On the other hand, persecuting a convict violate human rights; often without considering the aspects leading to such crime. Consider Saudi Arabia, ranked as the country with the lowest crime index in the world. The state’s implementation of a strict fundamentalist approach to persecute criminals regardless the circumstances of the crime has drawn flak from many human rights organisations. Amnesty International reported that fair trials are prohibited to criminals even if they are wrongly convicted. Finally, in my opinion, a convicted person should be given punishment only based on the circumstances and severity of the crime. For example, if someone murders in the act of self-defense, the verdict given should not amount to life-sentence. To conclude, inflicting fixed punishments may increase the safety and security of the society; however, it also violates the human rights a suspect is legally entitled to.
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. This essay will examine both sides of the argument and outline my opinion.

On the one hand,
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activities have
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over the centuries in the history of humankind.
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like the death penalty, life imprisonment for drug trafficking deter an offender from such heinous
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. The ruthlessness of such harsh
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punishments
ensured safety and security in the society.
For instance
, according to a publication on
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criminal
justice from the C. I. A, Saudi Arabia has been
consistently
ranked top regarding achieving a low-crime index due to its aggressive law for enforcing
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fixed
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for designated
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.
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doers. The
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contradicts with the fundamental objective of the civil society.

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without considering the aspects leading to such
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. Consider Saudi Arabia, ranked as the country with the lowest
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index in the world. The state’s implementation of a strict fundamentalist approach to persecute
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criminals
regardless the circumstances of the
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crime
has drawn flak from
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human rights
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organisations
. Amnesty International reported that
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even if they are
wrongly
convicted.

Finally
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.
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, if someone murders in the act of self-defense, the verdict
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should not amount to life-sentence.

To conclude
, inflicting
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may increase the safety and security of the society;
however
, it
also
violates the human rights a suspect is
legally
entitled to.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. v. 9

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301 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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