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Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for all types of crime. Others feel that the circumstances of an offence should be taken into account when deciding on a punishment

Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for all types of crime. Others feel that the circumstances of an offence should be taken into account when deciding on a punishment 7aPRA
Our system of official rules is being improved in a great effort to limit the number of offenders. However, could a fixed punishment helps to reduce those who commit all types of crime? While, some are in agreement, I strongly do not feel the same way One the one hand, it could be argued that having a fixed punishment for each crime is an effective way to reduce a number of offenders in certain respects. Those who support a fixed punishment say that the great benefit of it is its simplicity. The fixed punishment makes it easier for residents to be aware of the legal system. When people are able to exactly understand a dangerous level of their action as well as a sentence they have to accept, this would act as deterrent for embarking on a life of crime and tackling rising crime. An illustration of this is that the Singapore Government gives those who drop litter in public places a heavy fine under any circumstances. This method truly work when Singapore becomes one of the cleanest and greenest countries in the world. However, I feel that a fixed punishment is only suitable for minor illegalities and I hold the opinion that the court should consider the degree of each crime before reaching a decision on the sentence. For example, with those who are found guilty of killing a person, the judge need to take mitigating circumstances into consideration to determine that he or she commits murder or manslaughter. Obviously, if he or she tentionally kills a person, the government must take strong measures to be tough on crime. On the contrary, if that is only an unintentional motive, the lighter punishment should be imposed. I believe that people deserve a second chance and considering a criminal’s motivation certainly make a great contribution to make our legal system become fairer and more effective. When citizens have a firm belief in the correctness and humanitarian of the law, surely they enforce the law seriously To sum up, although it is undeniable that a fixed punishment is appropriate for minor crimes, it do not ensure the accuracy and humanitarian in all circumstances. Therefore, I side with those who believe that the court should take a right penalty into account for each offence
Our system of official
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rules
is being
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improved
in a great effort to limit the number of offenders.
However
, could a
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fixed
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punishment
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helps
to
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reduce
those
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who
commit all types of
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crime
? While,
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some
are in agreement, I
strongly
do not feel the same way

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the one hand, it could
be argued
that having a
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fixed
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punishment
for each
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crime
is an effective way to
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reduce
a number of offenders in certain respects. Those
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who
support a
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fixed
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punishment
say that the great benefit of it is its simplicity. The
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fixed
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punishment
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makes
it easier for residents to be aware of the legal system. When
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people
are able to exactly understand a
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dangerous
level of their action
as well
as a sentence they
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have to
accept, this would act as deterrent for embarking on a life of
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crime
and tackling rising
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crime
. An illustration of this is that the Singapore
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Government
gives those
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who
drop litter in public places a heavy fine under any circumstances. This method
truly
work when Singapore becomes one of the cleanest and greenest countries in the world.

However
, I feel that a
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fixed
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punishment
is
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only
suitable for minor illegalities and I hold the opinion that the court should consider the degree of each
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crime
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before
reaching a decision on the sentence.
For example
, with those
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who
are found
guilty of killing a person, the judge need to take mitigating circumstances into consideration to determine that he or she commits murder or manslaughter.
Obviously
, if he or she
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tentionally
kills a person, the
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government
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must
take strong measures to be tough on
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crime
.
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, if
that is
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only
an unintentional motive, the lighter
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punishment
should
be imposed
. I believe that
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people
deserve a second chance and considering a criminal’s motivation
certainly
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make
a great contribution to
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make
our legal system become fairer and more effective. When citizens have a firm belief in the correctness and humanitarian of the law,
surely
they enforce the law
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seriously


To sum up, although it is undeniable that a
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fixed
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punishment
is appropriate for minor
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crimes
, it
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do
not ensure the accuracy and humanitarian in all circumstances.
Therefore
, I side with those
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who
believe that the court should take a right penalty into account for each
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offence
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for all types of crime. Others feel that the circumstances of an offence should be taken into account when deciding on a punishment

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