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Some people believe that the teenagers should be allowed to use mobile phones in the class room. To what extent do you agree with this idea?

Some people believe that the teenagers should be allowed to use mobile phones in the class room. 3ABpw
It is obviously true that a segment of individuals believe that using cell phones can be beneficial for youngsters while they are in school. Even though some narrow-sighted people agree with this, I solidly deny it and this essay will state the reasons with a fair conclusion. There are very many significant causes to prohibit mobile phones during academics. First and foremost, if they use electronic devices, it may lead to deviating their attention from what they are learning. What I meant by this is, almost all the digital equipments are contained in different applications which are adversely affected children's mindset. Moreover, a recent survey which has done by the UNICEF shows that the students, who are living in the countries that have given the permission to the phones, are going downward from their education. In addition to this, the health diseases, which can be created through using smartphones for a long time, cannot be neglected. For instance, the scientists have found that plenty of harmful rays can be released, not only from large-scale computers but also from small-scale computers. However, it may cause students to be suffered from pathetic situations such as cancers although they had turned mobiles off. For example, a research which has done by the Harvard university depicts this matter in an attractive way by showing that the life expectancy of a newborn child has been decreasing from generation to generation. To sum up my writing I reiterate that using wireless phones during the school time will be a bane not a boon for youngsters because they can get addict and will get ill forever.
It is
obviously
true that a segment of individuals
believe
that using cell
phones
can be beneficial for youngsters while they are in school.
Even though
some
narrow-sighted
people
agree
with this, I
solidly
deny it and this essay will state the reasons with a
fair
conclusion. There are
very
many
significant causes to prohibit mobile
phones
during academics.
First
and foremost, if they
use
electronic devices, it may lead to deviating their attention from what they are learning. What I meant by this is, almost all the digital equipments
are contained
in
different
applications which are
adversely
affected
children's mindset.
Moreover
, a recent survey which has done by the UNICEF
shows
that the students, who are living in the countries that have
given
the permission to the
phones
, are going downward from their education.

In addition
to this, the health diseases, which can
be created
through using smartphones for a long time, cannot
be neglected
.
For instance
, the scientists have found that
plenty
of harmful rays can
be released
, not
only
from large-scale computers
but
also
from
small
-scale computers.
However
, it may cause students to
be suffered
from pathetic situations such as cancers although they had turned mobiles off.
For example
, a research which has done by the
Harvard university
depicts this matter
in an attractive way
by showing that the life expectancy of a newborn child has been decreasing from generation to generation.

To sum up my writing I reiterate that using wireless
phones
during the school time will be a bane not a boon for youngsters
because
they can
get
addict and will
get
ill forever.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the teenagers should be allowed to use mobile phones in the class room.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
269 words
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