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Some people believe that the students should take subjects of their choice but others think that the science and technology couses are useful for future. Discuss both views and give their opinion..

Some people believe that the students should take subjects of their choice but others think that the science and technology couses are useful for future. . 3Y2ON
Writing task 2 It is generally reckoned by the individuals that the college aspirants should learn according to their interest, but other ponder that the science and technology courses must be taken by the pupils. According to my prospective, if the learners are getting subject as their affinity, they study with full concentration; if the courses are restrict on them then, they are not get the fruitful result. There are certain people ponder that the tertary learners must learn whatever their interest in. I perceive that this will incline their concentration in studies. Moreover, if the pupils can choose their courses according to their interest; this will boost their result; the aspirants can show their own curiosity and they are not only restricted to science and technology. The learners can also get the opportunity to boost their career in arts and sports. Michel teacher of RV college research that the children who choose career as per their aspirations; they score better and passionate about their career. To exemplify, Sania Nehwal make her career in sports and become renowned sports person in badminton game this is possible because she choose her subject own. There are few people believe that there must be restriction on certain subjects such as science and technology. I think that, if learners have not been getting the freedom of choosing subjects then, it is not worthwhile for them but, they will get the stable job opportunities that they will not get in arts and music. The science and technology are theoretical subject; these subject increase their cognitive power. For instance, 50% of the Indian aspirants get the better employment because they re permitted to some important subjects. Hence, the idea of restricting science and technology is valid. In conclusion, I believe that the liberty has been giving to the learners so that, they can study different subjects of their own choice.
Writing task 2

It is
generally
reckoned by the individuals that the college aspirants should learn according to their interest,
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but
other ponder that the
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science
and
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technology
courses
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must
be taken
by the pupils. According to my prospective, if the
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learners
are getting
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subject
as their affinity, they study with full concentration; if the courses are
Consider using a past participle here: "restricted".
restrict
on them then, they are not
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get
the fruitful result.

There are certain
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people
ponder that the
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tertary
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learners
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must
learn whatever their interest in. I perceive that this will incline their concentration in studies.
Moreover
, if the pupils can choose their courses according to their interest; this will boost their result; the aspirants can
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show
their
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own
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
curiosity and
they are not
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only
restricted to
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science
and
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technology
. The
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learners
can
also
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get
the opportunity to boost their
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career
in arts and sports. Michel teacher of RV college research that the children who choose
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career
as per their aspirations; they score better and passionate about their
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career
. To exemplify,
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Sania
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Nehwal
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make
her
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career
in sports and become renowned sports person in badminton game this is possible
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because
she
The pronoun 'she' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "chooses", "chose".
choose
her
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subject
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own
.

There are few
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people
believe that there
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must
be restriction on certain
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subjects
such as
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science
and
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technology
. I
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think
that, if
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learners
have not been getting the freedom of choosing
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subjects
then, it is not worthwhile for them
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but
, they will
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get
the stable job opportunities that they will not
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get
in arts and music. The
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science
and
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technology
are theoretical
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subject
; these
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subject
increase their cognitive power.
For instance
, 50% of the Indian aspirants
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get
the better employment
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because
they re permitted to
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some
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important
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subjects
.
Hence
, the
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idea
of restricting
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science
and
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technology
is valid.

In conclusion
, I believe that the liberty has been giving to the
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learners
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so
that, they can study
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different
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subjects
of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
choice.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the students should take subjects of their choice but others think that the science and technology couses are useful for future. .

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314 words
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