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Some people believe that the radio is the best way to get news, while others believe that TV is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that the radio is the best way to get news, while others believe that TV is better for this purpose. v. 1
Everyone wants to stay informed of the happenings around them. They may get this information through a variety of sources like radio or television. Some people believe that the radio is better, while others believe that the television is the best. This essay will discuss both views and explain why television is a better source of news and information. Some people prefer to listen to radio for news and information. Radio certainly has many advantages. Firstly, it is very easy to carry it from one place to another since it is very lightweight. Secondly, you can listen to the radio even when you are traveling. Alternatively, you can listen to the radio while you are working in the kitchen, garage or garden because radio does not require a physically presence. For instance, many truck drivers use radio during long journeys and it is the first source of news for them. Finally, radio is very cheaper than television. Thus, some people find radio more useful than television. On the other hand, television has its own advantages. First and foremost, it shows the video along with the audio. That is why it becomes easier for viewers to understand the news completely. It is hard to describe everything through audio. The rise in the number of television viewers over the last few decades is a good indication. Furthermore, advancement in technology has drastically reduced the television’s price in the last few years. Therefore, people can now easily have access to television. To sum up, both radio and television are good at broadcasting news in their own ways. While radio is a good source when one travels, television provides a greater coverage of news. I opine that television is better than radio and its growing viewership is a testimony of this.
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the happenings around them
. They may
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get
this information through a variety of
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sources
like
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radio
or
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television
.
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Some
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people
believe that the
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radio
is better, while others believe that the
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television
is the best. This essay will discuss both views and
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explain
why
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television
is a better
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source
of
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news
and information.

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Some
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people
prefer to listen to
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radio
for
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news
and information.
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Radio
certainly
has
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many
advantages.
Firstly
, it is
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very
easy to carry it from one place to another since it is
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very
lightweight.
Secondly
, you can listen to the
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radio
even when you are traveling.
Alternatively
, you can listen to the
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radio
while you are working in the kitchen, garage or garden
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because
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radio
does not require a
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physically presence
.
For instance
,
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many
truck drivers
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use
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radio
during long journeys and it is the
first
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source
of
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news
for them.
Finally
,
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radio
is
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very
cheaper than
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television
.
Thus
,
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some
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people
find
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radio
more useful than television.

On the other hand
,
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television
has its
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own
advantages.
First
and foremost, it
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shows
the video along with the audio.
That is
why it becomes easier for viewers to understand the
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news
completely. It is
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hard
to
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describe
everything through audio. The rise in the number of
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television
viewers over the last few decades is a
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good
indication.
Furthermore
, advancement in technology has
drastically
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reduced
the
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television’s
price in the last few years.
Therefore
,
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people
can
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now
easily
have access to television.

To sum up, both
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radio
and
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television
are
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good
at broadcasting
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news
in their
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own
ways. While
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radio
is a
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good
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source
when one travels,
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television
provides a greater coverage of
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news
. I opine that
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television
is better than
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radio
and its growing viewership is a testimony of this.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the radio is the best way to get news, while others believe that TV is better for this purpose. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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