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Some people believe that the best way to travel within a city is by car. Others believe it is best to travel by bicycle. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

These days a number of people want to travel by car inside of the city and other people says that bicycle is the excellent choice for traveling inside of the city. In my opinion, bicycle is the best choice for traveling within the city. To begin with, present days in cities traffic is extremely significant and also reaching to the office or a super market takes a ample of time. The reason is, every one using the cars for small to big work this creates a plethora amount of traffic in the roads and countless of people are staying the roads solely. Further more, roads are very small and they are not upto date as per standards this also a major problem struck in the traffic. For instance, in hyderabad 7 killo meters of travelling takes 2 hours of time due to the fact of cars and also roads are small. Thus, cars are the major problems for waiting long hours within the city and roads are not in present standards. Futher more, fot this problems bicycle is the vital solutions and bicycle also a environment friendly. This is because, inside of the city taveling time takes 2 hours by car but with the help of bicycle it takes just 30 minutes. For example, in Netherlands a number of people travel through bicycle solely and according to the citizens of Netherland for them it was took only 25 minutes of time to reach the offcie while they using the car it were took one and half hour. As a result, bicycle is the excellent choice for travelling within the city and pollution also be reduced. In conclusion, cars is the best choice for travelling long distances and within the city bicycle is the alternative choice and bicycle is the environment friendly.
These days a number of
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people
want to travel by
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car
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inside of
the city and other
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people
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says
that
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bicycle
is the excellent
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choice
for traveling
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inside of
the city. In my opinion,
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bicycle
is the best
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choice
for traveling within the city.

To
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begin
with, present days in
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cities
traffic is
extremely
significant and
also
reaching to the office or a super market takes
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a ample of
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time
. The reason is, every one using the
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cars
for
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small
to
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big
work this creates a plethora amount of traffic in the
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roads
and countless of
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people
are staying the
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roads
solely
.
Further
more,
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roads
are
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very
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small and
they are not
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upto
date as per standards this
also
a major problem struck in the traffic.
For instance
, in
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hyderabad
7
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killo
meters of travelling takes 2
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hours
of
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time
due to the fact of
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cars
and
also
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roads
are
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small
.
Thus
,
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cars
are the major problems for waiting long
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hours
within the city and
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roads
are not in present standards.

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Futher
more,
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fot
this problems
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bicycle
is the vital solutions and
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bicycle
also
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a
environment friendly. This is
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because
,
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inside of
the city
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taveling
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time
takes 2
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hours
by
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car
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but
with the
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help
of
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bicycle
it takes
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just
30 minutes.
For example
,
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in Netherlands
a number of
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people
travel through
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bicycle
solely
and according to the citizens of
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Netherland
for them it was
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took
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only
25 minutes of
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time
to reach the
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offcie
while
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they using
the
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car
it were
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took
one and half
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hour
.
As a result
,
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bicycle
is the excellent
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choice
for travelling within the city and pollution
also
be
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reduced
.

In conclusion
,
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cars
is the best
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choice
for travelling long distances and within the city
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bicycle
is the alternative
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choice
and
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bicycle
is the environment friendly.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the best way to travel within a city is by car. Others believe it is best to travel by bicycle.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
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