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Some people believe that the activity of large multinational corporations mostly benefits the economy of developing countries. Other people take the opposite view and feel that these large multinationals are generally harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Some people believe that the activity of large multinational corporations mostly benefits the economy of developing countries. Other people take the opposite view and feel that these large multinationals are generally harmful. 1
In recent years, many companies are expanding and are now global. Some people are of the view that these companies have a positive effect on the economy of less developed countries, whereas, others believe that these corporations mainly harm these countries. Although, there have been more job offers in some developing parts of the world owing to the activity of these corporations, however, I believe that they are harmful due to the huge finances on the products of these business, while more important needs are neglected. On the one hand, the rise in employment opportunities in some less developed nations have been attributed to the activity of large global corporations. These businesses create flight of capital from some wealthy individuals to many poor countries, which help to establish branch offices resulting in jobs for many people, ranging from unskilled labour force to technologists and engineers. For instance, multinational companies such as Total and Shell are the major employer of labour in the Niger delta region of Nigeria. This reveals an important benefit of such corporations. On the other hand, some people think that these big corporations prevent the citizens of less developed countries from allocating scare resource to urgent needs. Through advertisements and promotions, some people are not able to distinguish their needs from their wants and subsequently, spend huge amount of their income on luxury, decreasing their savings and infrastructure development. More so, the profits of these businesses are not often retained in developing countries. For example, in recent years, companies like Apple have increased the expenditure on electronic devices in many developing parts of the world with no appreciable economical benefits. Therefore, this has deleterious consequences on the economical growth of such countries. I agree with this view. In conclusion, the activity of huge multinational corporations create employment opportunities for many citizens in developing countries, however, I hold the view that it negatively impair on the economy of these nations due to the increase in spending on the products of these business. Efforts geared towards promoting this view should be encouraged.
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are expanding and are
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now
global.
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people
are of the view that these
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companies
have a
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positive
effect on the economy of less developed
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countries
, whereas, others believe that these
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corporations
mainly
harm these
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countries
. Although, there have been more job offers in
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some
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developing
parts of the world owing to the activity of these
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corporations
,
however
, I believe that they are harmful due to the huge finances on the products of these
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business
, while more
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important
needs
are neglected
.

On the one hand, the rise in employment opportunities in
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some
less developed nations have
been attributed
to the activity of large global
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corporations
. These
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businesses
create flight of capital from
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some
wealthy individuals to
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many
poor
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countries
, which
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help
to establish branch offices resulting in jobs for
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many
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people
, ranging from unskilled
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labour
force to technologists and engineers.
For instance
, multinational
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companies
such as Total and Shell are the major employer of
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labour
in the Niger delta region of Nigeria. This reveals an
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important
benefit of such corporations.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
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think
that these
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big
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corporations
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prevent
the citizens of less developed
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countries
from allocating scare resource to urgent needs. Through advertisements and promotions,
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some
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people
are not able to distinguish their needs from their wants and
subsequently
, spend huge amount of their income on luxury, decreasing their savings and infrastructure development. More
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so
, the profits of these
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businesses
are not
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often
retained in
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developing
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countries
.
For example
, in recent years,
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companies
like Apple have increased the expenditure on electronic devices in
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many
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developing
parts of the world with no appreciable
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economical
benefits.
Therefore
, this has deleterious consequences on the
Did you mean "economic" (=connected with economy)?
economical
growth of such
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countries
. I
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agree
with this view.

In conclusion
, the activity of huge multinational
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corporations
create employment opportunities for
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many
citizens in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
developing
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countries
,
however
, I hold the view that it
negatively
impair on the economy of these nations due to the increase in spending on the products of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
. Efforts geared towards promoting this view should
be encouraged
.
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28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the activity of large multinational corporations mostly benefits the economy of developing countries. Other people take the opposite view and feel that these large multinationals are generally harmful. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
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