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Some people believe that the activities of large multinational corporations mostly benefits the economics of developing countries. Other people don't and think that these are hurmful

Some people believe that the activities of large multinational corporations mostly benefits the economics of developing countries. Other people don't and think that these are hurmful Lem6
The commercial activities of multinational companies are becoming increasingly debatable. Some people think that the actions of huge global companies are beneficial to countries with growing economies while others maintain that these companies have mainly negative impacts. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why such multinationals are superior. There are a growing number of people who believe that multinationals are effective patterns in terms of economic developments among industrial nations. Put simply, the international investments provide local people with high paying jobs. Hence, a local company could be a branch of a larger business which can make the huge profits. In canada, for example, Evidence suggests that the employees of internationals earn 32% more than staff of independent businesses. Overall, these people have good reason to believe that multinational corporations are highly profitable. In contrast to employees who believe that big global companies have several advantages are those who feel that these have opposite effects which must be considered. One important issue is that these companies take customers from small firms. This means that the local businesses would be in economic recession and even they are likely to be bankrupt. Restuarant chains of McDonald, for example, spend a lot of money to advertise their products, causing local restaurants could not sell their own food products. In short, there are a number of people claim that multinationals have damaging effects. In conclusion, whether or not to benefit multinational enterprises in developing societies is arguable. ( a number of people think that multinational enterprises benefit. Other employees disagree and feel that these companies are hurmful). This essay discussed the various reasons why people hold these points of views and wether these would be a part of economic development. In my opinion, despite having some negative influences, I believe multinational corporations are generally beneficial.
The commercial activities of
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multinational
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companies
are becoming
increasingly
debatable.
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Some
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people
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think
that the actions of huge global
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companies
are beneficial to countries with growing economies while others maintain that these
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companies
have
mainly
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negative
impacts. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why such
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multinationals
are superior.

There are a growing number of
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people
who
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believe
that
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multinationals
are effective patterns in terms of economic developments among industrial nations. Put
simply
, the international investments provide
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local
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people
with high paying jobs.
Hence
, a
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local
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company
could be a branch of a larger business which can
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make
the huge profits. In
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canada
,
for example
, Evidence suggests that the employees of internationals earn 32% more than staff of independent businesses.
Overall
, these
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people
have
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good
reason to
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believe
that
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multinational
corporations are
highly
profitable.

In contrast
to employees who
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believe
that
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big
global
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companies
have several advantages are those who feel that these have opposite effects which
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must
be considered
. One
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important
issue is that these
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companies
take customers from
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small
firms. This means that the
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local
businesses would be in economic recession and even they are likely to be bankrupt.
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Restuarant
chains of McDonald,
for example
, spend
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a lot of
money to advertise their products, causing
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local
restaurants could not sell their
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own
food products. In short, there are a number of
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people
claim that
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multinationals
have damaging effects.

In conclusion
,
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whether or not
to benefit
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multinational
enterprises in developing societies is arguable.
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(
a number of
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people
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think
that
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multinational
enterprises benefit. Other employees disagree and feel that these
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companies
are
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hurmful
). This essay discussed the various reasons why
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people
hold these points of views and
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wether
these would be a part of economic development. In my opinion, despite having
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some
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negative
influences, I
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believe
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multinational
corporations are
generally
beneficial.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the activities of large multinational corporations mostly benefits the economics of developing countries. Other people don't and think that these are hurmful

Essay
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4 paragraphs
311 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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