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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can be benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agreee or disagree?

It is undeniable true that unpaid community work has increased rapidly since few years. Therefore, some individuals opine that young children ought to do work in such place during their free time. It showed that this benefited for both organisations as well as helpers. This essay agrees because firstly, teenagers would learn new things and community also develop. There are ample of reasons why the young children allocate their free time. The first and predominant reason is about learning of itself. This is to say that, after studying of academic books once should also focus on enhancing skills. If any juvenile do work without getting any money that time someone feel real work and develop some skills like honestly and helping. Although there are lot to learn from school, unpaid work always gives real life meaning. Moreover, in this way image of that person in society also become good person. In their career chances of getting jobs in future higher because of knowing many knowledge which acquired through that work. For example, teenager who has work once in their life are more anxiety free and well settled in future. In addition to it, it is also seen that a community also get benefited through help of such exticted children. If any organizations get continuous support from workers and helpers than it becomes easy to run that community. In other words, often such a unpaid community hindrance the lack of money and workers. Therefore, work can provide by that children so, no more extra expenditures require to do. In future such community also get enlarge and develop well to provide need easily to any require person. For instance, as reported that one environment pollution restriction community planted thousands of new trees with help of children. It also pivotal step towards better environment. In conclusion, young children often provide free time to unpaid community because in this way their learning get two fold and betterment for that organization too.
It is undeniable true that unpaid
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community
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work
has increased
rapidly
since few years.
Therefore
,
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some
individuals opine that young
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children
ought to do
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work
in such place during their
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free
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time
. It
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showed
that this benefited for both
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organisations
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as well as
helpers. This essay
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agrees
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because
firstly
,
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teenagers
would learn new things and
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community
also
develop.

There are ample of reasons why the young
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children
allocate their
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free
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time
. The
first
and predominant reason is about learning of itself. This is to say that, after studying of academic books once should
also
focus on enhancing
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skills
. If any juvenile do
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work
without getting any money that
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time
someone
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feel
real
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work
and develop
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some
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skills
like
honestly
and helping. Although there are
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lot
to learn from school, unpaid
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work
always gives real life meaning.
Moreover
, in this way image of that person in society
also
become
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good
person. In their career chances of getting jobs in future higher
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because
of knowing
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many knowledge
which acquired through that
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work
.
For example
,
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teenager
who has
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work
once in their life are more anxiety
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free
and well settled
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in future
.

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to it, it is
also
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seen
that a
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community
also
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get
benefited through
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help
of such
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exticted
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children
. If any
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organizations
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get
continuous support from workers and helpers than it becomes easy to run that
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community
.
In other words
,
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often
such
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a
unpaid
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community
hindrance the lack of money and workers.
Therefore
,
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work
can provide by that
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children
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so
, no more extra expenditures require
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to do
. In future such
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community
also
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get
enlarge and develop well to provide need
easily
to any require person.
For instance
, as reported that one environment pollution restriction
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community
planted thousands of new trees with
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help
of
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children
. It
also
pivotal step towards better environment.

In conclusion
, young
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children
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often
provide
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free
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time
to unpaid
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community
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because
in this way their learning
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get
The adjective or adverb ‘twofold’ needs to be written as one word.
two fold
and betterment for that
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organization
too.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can be benefit teenagers and the community as well.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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