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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Experts throughout both the developing and developed countries have debated over the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as smartphones, laptops, iPad, desktops advantages and their impact on the human being. Technology has definitely enhanced and improved people's social life drastically or vice versa. Personally, I strongly believe the former view of its advantage, In this essay will discuss both views to demonstrate point and prove arguments. Firstly, the innovation of electronics has shrinked distance between two countries, currently all are interconnected with each other. Nowadays, communication unlike olden times is effortless, whereas during earlier decades it was time consuming, because the process of telegram and post cards being delivered was by human being. So, these advancement helped us to connect freely and easily without any geographical barriers. For example students or adults who are in abroad for higher educations and jobs can communicate with their families, thus feeling a proximity and closeness, in turn they are less likely to experience loneliness. Thus, their bond of closeness and proximity does not gets altered. Therefore technology has benefitted us in plenty of ways. Even though the merits are higher we cannot blind side the drawback it beholds. Firstly, it has created an addictive impact on each individual be it of any age, the increase in screen time has a significant effect on mental health, the physiology of human brains are affected. In addition to the health affect our traditional ways of face to face interaction has reduced dramatically in the past few years, everyone is tending to fall onto a loop of social networks sites, they are isolating themselves from the society and leading a sedentary lifestyle. The essence of quality time is long lost. In conclusion, even with the demerits which individual and governments should look into for an effective solution, the tech era will continue to flourish even in the near future. Hence, it is our responsibility to balance out between the extreme and moderate use of mobile phones and other devices.
Experts throughout both the developing and
developed countries
have debated over the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as smartphones, laptops, iPad, desktops advantages and their impact on the human being. Technology has definitely enhanced and
improved
people
's social life
drastically
or vice versa.
Personally
, I
strongly
believe the former view of its advantage, In this essay will discuss both views to demonstrate point and prove arguments.

Firstly
, the innovation of electronics has
shrinked
distance between two countries,
currently
all
are interconnected
with each other. Nowadays, communication unlike olden
times
is effortless, whereas during earlier decades it was
time consuming
,
because
the process of telegram and post cards
being delivered
was by human being.
So
,
these advancement
helped
us to connect
freely
and
easily
without any geographical barriers.
For example
students or adults who are in abroad for higher educations and jobs can communicate with their families,
thus
feeling a proximity and closeness, in turn they are less likely to experience loneliness.
Thus
, their bond of closeness and proximity does not
gets
altered.
Therefore
technology has
benefitted
us in
plenty
of ways.

Even though
the merits are higher we cannot blind side the drawback it beholds.
Firstly
, it has created an addictive impact on each individual be it of any age, the increase in screen
time
has a significant effect on mental health, the physiology of human brains are
affected
.
In addition
to the health affect our traditional ways of face to face interaction has
reduced
dramatically
in the past few years, everyone is tending to fall onto a loop of social networks sites, they are isolating themselves from the society and leading a sedentary lifestyle. The essence of quality
time
is
long lost
.

In conclusion
, even with the demerits which individual and
governments
should look into for an effective solution, the tech era will continue to flourish even in the near future.
Hence
, it is our responsibility to balance out between the extreme and moderate
use
of mobile phones and other devices.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that technology has made man more social. with this opinion?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
6.0
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