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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.25

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 25
Education for a child is the most important aspect of one's life. This will help a child to make better decisions and helps the society. Based on family financial situations or other circumstances, one can choose their child's education at home or either in a school. Both have pros and cons. I will discuss both the views in the essay below. Teaching at home helps parents choose the best curriculum available and the study. Under the administration of parents, a child can have more freedom to study according to their interests. However, they miss the opportunity and facilities a school offers in terms of sports and other events. For example, one of my friend's daughter studies at home, she has never been to a sports facility with her friends, which makes her less active in Sports. Nevertheless, Sending a child to a school helps them to mingle with other students, improves communication skills and increases competitive spirit. But the school education is very expensive and only rich can afford a seat in a well-known school because such schools nowadays offer studies in digital formats. For example, my friend is paying two third's of his salary as school fees for one of his kids. In conclusion, Both studying at home or school have their own advantages and disadvantages. Keeping high fees in mind, home study is preferable, and children will be more disciplined than a child goes to school. In the case of meeting new children and to have a great competitive spirit studying at school has more advantages.
Education for a
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make
better decisions and
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helps
the society. Based on family financial situations or other circumstances, one can choose their child's education at home or either in a
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school
. Both have pros and cons. I will discuss both the views in the essay below.

Teaching at home
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helps
parents choose the best curriculum available and the
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study
. Under the administration of parents, a
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child
can have more freedom to
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study
according to their interests.
However
, they miss the opportunity and facilities a
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school
offers in terms of sports and other
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events
.
For example
, one of my friend's daughter
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studies
at home, she has never been to a sports facility with her friends, which
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makes
her less active in Sports.

Nevertheless
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to a
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helps
them to mingle with other students,
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improves
communication
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skills
and increases competitive spirit.
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education is
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expensive and
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only
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nowadays offer
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studies
in digital formats.
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, my friend is paying two
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fees for one of his kids.

In conclusion
, Both studying at home or
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school
have their
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own
advantages and disadvantages. Keeping high fees in mind, home
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study
is preferable, and children will be more disciplined than a
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child
goes to
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school
. In the case of meeting new children and to have a great competitive spirit studying at
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school
has more advantages.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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