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Some people believe that teachers play an important role in a child's success, while others feel the students attitude is more important.

Some people believe that teachers play an important role in a child's success, while others feel the students attitude is more important. 1bWNL
It is widely acknowledged that success consists of support. But when it comes to a child's success people hold conflicting views. Some individuals assert that teachers perform a vital role in a child's success, while others advocate that the relationship between students is more important. In this essay, I will discuss both views and state my own position. On one side of an argument, there are people who argue that tutors perform a significant function in students' success considerably outweigh its disadvantages, such as the support of peers. The main reason is that mentors possess vital knowledge that helps students for achieving their targets. For instance, students are able to incorrectly distribute resources for achievement aim, in this situation tutors advise planning achievement of an aim. On the other hand, some people are of the opinion that relationship between peers is more essential. The fundamental reason is that students are able to rely on their mates because they have common interests and goals. Hence, a student who has such aims as his mates is able to get motivated for the achievement of set goals. In my opinion, despite that, the success of a student requires a certain attitude from the people around him, in light of the above factors, I firmly believe that relations between tutors and students have an essential position in the realization of aims.
It is
widely
acknowledged that
success
consists of support.
But
when it
comes
to a child's
success
people
hold conflicting views.
Some
individuals assert that teachers perform a vital role in a child's
success
, while others advocate that the relationship between
students
is more
important
. In this essay, I will discuss both views and state my
own
position.

On one side of an argument, there are
people
who argue that tutors perform a significant function in students'
success
considerably
outweigh its disadvantages, such as the support of peers. The main reason is that mentors possess vital knowledge that
helps
students
for achieving their targets.
For instance
,
students
are able to
incorrectly
distribute resources for achievement aim, in this situation tutors advise planning achievement of an aim.

On the other hand
,
some
people
are of the opinion that relationship between peers is more essential. The fundamental reason is that
students
are able to rely on their mates
because
they have common interests and goals.
Hence
, a
student
who has such aims as his mates is able to
get
motivated for the achievement of set goals.

In my opinion, despite that, the
success
of a
student
requires a certain attitude from the
people
around him, in light of the above factors, I
firmly
believe that relations between tutors and
students
have an essential position in the realization of aims.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teachers play an important role in a child's success, while others feel the students attitude is more important.

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