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Some people believe that sucess in life comes from taking risks or chances. others believe that sucess results from careful planning .in your opinion, what does sucess come from?

Some people believe that sucess in life comes from taking risks or chances. others believe that sucess results from careful planning. in your opinion, what does sucess come from? ejAO
Taking risk is similar to gambling. Risk has positive and negative effects. The importance of taking couragess which is always debatable has now become controversial with many people believe that to be successful in a life, risk is necessary while other reject this notion. Rest of the people think that proper planning is critical to be successful. According to me, both play crucial role in everyone life. i will delve on the statement in the upcoming paragraph. To embark on, on the one side of the coin, taking risk is very important in the life of people, without trying it, individuals are not able to know what the outcomes could be. For instance, if a cosmetic company wants to launch a new brand related to the foundation, then they have to take risk to launch it into the market. It is pertinent to mention that, after introducing it, they get feedback from the people, either it has positive or negative effect on the skin. Moreover, inhabitants should do something into their life. On the flip side of the coin, synchronization of ideas play paramount role in the life of people. In addition to this, careful planning is must, if people want to get success in their life. To illustrate, if a company want to bring laptop into the market, then they should have proper planning into their mind. Furthermore, how much amenities they want to introduce into the electronic gadget such as removable battery, screen with keyboard, charging point, storage, about camera. These things are the important part of the laptop. So it is crystal clear that, they should organize it in a best way. To conclude, I opine that, risk and careful planning should go hand by hand. If people plan something to launch into the market, then they have to take risk to know the outcomes
Taking
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is similar to gambling.
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Risk
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and
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effects. The importance of taking
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couragess
which is always debatable has
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become controversial with
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many
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people
believe that to be successful in a
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life
,
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risk
is necessary while other reject this notion. Rest of the
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people
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think
that proper
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planning
is critical to be successful.
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According to me
, both play crucial role in everyone
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life
.
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i
will delve on the statement in the upcoming paragraph.

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risk
is
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very
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important
in the
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life
of
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people
, without trying it, individuals are not able to know what the outcomes could be.
For instance
, if a cosmetic
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company
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wants
to launch a new brand related to the foundation, then they
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have to
take
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risk
to launch it into the market. It is pertinent to mention that, after introducing it, they
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get
feedback from the
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people
, either it has
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positive
or
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negative
effect on the skin.
Moreover
, inhabitants should do something into their life.

On the flip side of the coin, synchronization of
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ideas
play paramount role in the
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life
of
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people
.
In addition
to this, careful
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planning
is
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must
, if
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people
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want
to
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get
success in their
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life
. To illustrate, if a
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company
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want
to bring laptop into the market, then they should have proper
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planning
into their mind.
Furthermore
, how
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much
amenities they
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want
to introduce into the electronic gadget such as removable battery, screen with keyboard, charging point, storage, about camera. These things are the
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important
part of the laptop.
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So
it is crystal
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clear
that, they should organize it in
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a
best way.

To conclude
, I opine that,
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risk
and careful
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planning
should go hand by hand. If
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people
plan something to launch into the market, then they
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have to
take
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risk
to know the
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outcomes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that sucess in life comes from taking risks or chances. others believe that sucess results from careful planning. in your opinion, what does sucess come from?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
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