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Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? what measures can be taken to protect them.

Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. what measures can be taken to protect them. koW8
These days companies are highly promoting consumerism to users through numbers of advertisements. I think buyers are getting motivated easily through such adverts and purchase the products shown in advertisement. Some steps should be taken by government to protect them. To commence with, these days people are more active on social media, such as facebook and twitter, and share their likes and dislikes with their near and dear ones. Consequently, companies buy data from social media platforms, to learn people's behaviour. Based on this, they target users to show advertisements to trap them. For example, people get more advertisements on food and drinks they likes as they might have searched online while ordering food. As a result, people eat unhealthy food and face health issues, such as cardiac problems and obesity. Furthermore, to compete with others, companies do advertisements in big events, such as cricket match and live music concerts, as company knows millions of people will be attending the event. As a result, more users influenced by the product's advertisement and end up spending more money on products which they do not need. To protect consumers, government should banned advertisements if repeatedly target by the company. Moreover, Consumers should be given control to block advertisements without their consent. Also, users should compare products before buying as it may lead to getting duplicate products from false advertisement company. To conclude, I think consumers are easy to get influenced by multiple number of advertisement from the competing companies. I believe consumer should not fall in trap and fake advertisements. Also, to prevent this government should spread awareness among the people and banned the advertisement which are targeted without consumer's consent.
These days
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companies
are
highly
promoting consumerism to
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users
through numbers of
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advertisements
. I
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think
buyers are getting motivated
easily
through such adverts and
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purchase
the
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products
shown in
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advertisement
.
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Some
steps should
be taken
by
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government
to protect them.

To commence with, these days
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people
are more active on social media, such as
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facebook
and twitter, and share their likes and dislikes with their near and dear ones.
Consequently
,
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companies
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buy
data from social media platforms, to learn
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people
's
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behaviour
. Based on this, they target
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users
to
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show
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advertisements
to trap them.
For example
,
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people
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get
more
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advertisements
on food and drinks they
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likes
as they might have searched online while ordering food.
As a result
,
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people
eat unhealthy food and face health issues, such as cardiac problems and obesity.

Furthermore
, to compete with others,
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companies
do
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advertisements
in
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big
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events
, such as cricket match and
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live
music concerts, as
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company
knows millions of
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people
will be attending the
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event
.
As a result
, more
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users
influenced by the product's
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advertisement
and
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end
up spending more money on
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products
which they do not need.

To protect
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consumers
,
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government
should
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banned
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advertisements
if
repeatedly
target by the
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company
.
Moreover
,
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Consumers
should be
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given
control to block
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advertisements
without their consent.
Also
,
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users
should compare
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products
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before
buying as it may lead to getting duplicate
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products
from false
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advertisement
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company
.

To conclude
, I
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think
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consumers
are easy to
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get
influenced by multiple number of
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advertisement
from the competing
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companies
. I believe
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consumer
should not fall in trap and fake
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advertisements
.
Also
, to
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prevent
this
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government
should spread awareness among the
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people
and banned the
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advertisement
which
are targeted
without consumer's consent.
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IELTS essay Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. what measures can be taken to protect them.

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