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Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning.

Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. lGmQ
Once upon time, a man pleaded a piece of land from a tribe chief. The chief gave the man a pole and told him that if he could insert the pole in a place from which he could come back before the sunset, the land between tribe station and the pole would belong to him. The man was so greedy that he exhausted to death on the way back. From this story we can see that although the man had his goal and action, he had no plan. A good plan is essential for success. It can quantify the task and make it possible for a man to arrange his time effectively. First, by means of planning a man quantifies his task. He divides his final target into several periodic ones. Thus, he could average the pressure and see his progress during each period. A good plan encourages a man to fultill his destination positively rather than passively. Actually, all successful people have their careful plans. For example, an excellent student must have a study schedule that include how to learn new knowledge and how to review old contents; an outstanding businessman needs a rational marketing plan that defines the best avenues to reach his target customer and then assigns a reasonable budget to his efforts. If one could execute his periodic target successfully every time, he could easily achieve his ultimate target. More significantly, during this process a man will acquire a lot of qualities that are essential to success. Secondly, the advantage of good planning is that one can dispose his time and energy more effectively. It occurs very often in life that one should do a lot of things simultaneously. To take care of his children, to work, to spend enough time with his family and friends, only by a careful planning can a man accomplish his several targets in a short time. Let us come back to the former story. If the man were a coward he would always fear that he could not come back before the sunset. The answer must be that he got much less than what he could have. Therefore success, to some extent, needs risk. But I think a careful plan is more important because it changes success into a routine and it helps a man use his time more effectively.
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pleaded a piece of land from a tribe chief. The chief gave the
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man
a pole and
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him that if he could insert the pole in a place from which he could
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before
the sunset, the land between tribe station and the pole would belong to him. The
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was
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so
greedy that he exhausted to death on the way
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back
. From this story we can
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that although the
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man
had his goal and action, he had no
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plan
. A
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good
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plan
is essential for success. It can quantify the task and
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make
it possible for a
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man
to arrange his
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time
effectively
.

First
, by means of planning a
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man
quantifies his task. He divides his final
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target
into several periodic ones.
Thus
, he could average the pressure and
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see
his progress during each period. A
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good
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plan
encourages a
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to
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fultill
his destination
positively
rather
than
passively
. Actually, all successful
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have their careful
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plans
.
For example
, an excellent student
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must
have a study schedule that include how to learn new knowledge and how to review
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old
contents; an outstanding businessman needs a rational marketing
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plan
that defines the best avenues to reach his
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target
customer and then assigns a reasonable budget to his efforts. If one could execute his periodic
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target
successfully
every
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, he could
easily
achieve his ultimate
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target
. More
significantly
, during this process a
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will acquire
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a lot of
qualities that are essential to success.

Secondly
, the advantage of
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good
planning is that one can dispose his
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and energy more
effectively
. It occurs
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very
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in life that one should do
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a lot of
things
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. To take care of his children, to work, to spend
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enough
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with his family and friends,
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only
by a careful planning can a
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accomplish his several
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targets
in a short time.

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to the former story. If the
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were a coward he would always fear that he could not
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the sunset. The answer
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be that he
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much less than what he could have.
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success, to
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extent, needs
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risk
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a careful
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is more
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important
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it
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changes
success into a routine and it
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more
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IELTS essay Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
390 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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