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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. 0OV1
Education means imparting knowledge to a person. Better education is the first step to enter into the best career. Some people are on the view that studying at college or university is the best way to a successful career, while others are in another opinion that getting a job after school is better. This essay analyses both these arguments. On the one hand, there are some benefits of getting a job straight after school. Firstly, work means steady earning, so it helps to earn money and thus reduces the financial burden of the family especially among low-class communities. Another important benefit is that doing a particular job creates a feeling of responsibility. As a result, the person becomes more independent and self-reliant at younger age itself. On the other hand, it is fairly easy to understand the advantages of studying at university or college. Firstly, learning always increases our knowledge and widens our educational horizons as well. This helps in the moulding of overall personality and to succeed in his career. Secondly, professional education or higher education at university level is the backbone of one person’s career. To make it more clear, basic education from schools helps to identify our talents and interests of various subjects and courses and college level education is the field where we sow the seeds for better career opportunities. More over it helps to get better job opportunities. This is because proper higher level education improves the qualification and the door to better job places. Also, helps to get good remuneration. In addition, proper and good education always acts as a better deposit for the successful career and it is an asset. To conclude, when we weigh both the view points, it is crystal clear that studying at university or college is the best route to success in career. Getting a job after school has more demerits than merits. The government should take proper steps to give better education to a higher level to all irrespective of financial status, religion, casts etc.
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education
is the
first
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career
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Some
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people
are on the view that studying at college or
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university
is the best way to a successful
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career
, while others are in another opinion that getting a
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job
after
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school
is
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better
. This essay analyses both these arguments.

On the one hand, there are
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some
benefits of getting a
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job
straight after
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school
.
Firstly
, work means steady earning,
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so
it
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helps
to earn money and
thus
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reduces
the financial burden of the family
especially
among low-
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class
communities. Another
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important
benefit is that doing a particular
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job
creates a feeling of responsibility.
As a result
, the person becomes more independent and self-reliant at younger age itself.

On the other hand
, it is
fairly
easy to understand the advantages of studying at
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university
or college.
Firstly
, learning always increases our knowledge and widens our educational horizons
as well
. This
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helps
in the
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moulding
of
overall
personality and to succeed in his
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career
.
Secondly
, professional
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education
or higher
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education
at
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university
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level
is the backbone of one person’s
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career
. To
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make
it more
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clear
, basic
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education
from
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schools
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helps
to identify our talents and interests of various subjects and courses and college
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level
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education
is the field where we sow the seeds for
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better
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career
opportunities. More over it
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helps
to
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get
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better
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job
opportunities. This is
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because
proper higher
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level
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education
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improves
the qualification and the door to
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better
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job
places.
Also
,
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to
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get
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remuneration.
In addition
, proper and
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good
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education
always acts as a
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deposit for the successful
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career
and it is an asset.

To conclude
, when we weigh both the view points, it is crystal
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clear
that studying at
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university
or college is the best route to success in
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career
. Getting a
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job
after
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school
has more demerits than merits. The
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government
should take proper steps to give
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better
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education
to a higher
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level
to all irrespective of financial status, religion, casts etc.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
337 words
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