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Some people believe that social networks have had a negative impact on people and community .

Some people believe that social networks have had a negative impact on people and community. RR03W
Using social networking has become tend among people. Therefore, they utilise internet for different purposes such as collecting information about the world and students use it for studying. However, several individuals opine that social networking sites have had negative impact on masses and community. I will discuss some reasons of negative effects on people in the following paragraphs. Owing to the advancement of technology every person in the wlrls use social media such as Facebook and WhatsApp on their daily basis which really helpful for masses. However, over use of internet people are facings number of difficulties in their life like as health problems for example, a survey was conducted by the USA University in 2017, and it concluded that more than 13% of masses faced health problems such as weak eye sight as well as depression by over use of social sites. In addition, the individual's use these sites for completing their work regarding office or study. But they donot know pertaining to the side effects of over use of internet. The internet not only effect the people but also effect the society b. As everyone use social sites. But sometimes the people use it for illegal activities such as hacking and leakage of information. But most of the people visit the illegal sites on internet by which they commit crimes, and it effects the community. By these criminal, one can face difficulties. Because these heckers leak the personal information of a person and then use it for committing crimes. For instance, a research was conducted the Canada In 2015, and it revealed that 13% of people used to commit crimes by utilising social networking sites which leads to difficulties in the community. Hence, dearth of privacy on social media, some offenders commit crimes and it not only effect people but also effect community. To conclude, although social networking is a great way of collect information about the world but most of the people use it for performing illegal activities. It is high time government imposed stringent laws against criminals.
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networking has become tend among
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people
.
Therefore
, they
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utilise
internet for
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different
purposes such as collecting
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information
about the world and students
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use
it for studying.
However
, several individuals opine that
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social
networking
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sites
have had
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negative
impact on masses and
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community
. I will discuss
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some
reasons of
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effects on
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people
in the following paragraphs. Owing to the advancement of technology every person in the
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wlrls
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use
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social
media such as Facebook and WhatsApp on their daily basis which
really
helpful for masses.
However
, over
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use
of internet
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people
are facings number of difficulties in their life like as health problems
for example
, a survey
was conducted
by the USA University in 2017, and
it concluded
that more than 13% of masses faced health problems such as weak
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eye sight
as well
as depression by over
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use
of
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social
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sites
.
In addition
, the individual's
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use
these
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sites
for completing their work regarding office or study.
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But
they
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donot
know pertaining to the side effects of over
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use
of internet. The internet not
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only
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effect
the
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people
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also
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the society b. As everyone
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.
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sometimes
the
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people
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use
it for illegal activities such as hacking and leakage of
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information
.
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But
most of the
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people
visit the illegal
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sites
on internet by which they commit
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crimes
, and it effects the
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community
. By these criminal, one can face difficulties.
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Because
these
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heckers
leak the personal
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information
of a person and then
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use
it for committing
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crimes
.
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,
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a research
was conducted
the Canada In 2015, and it revealed that 13% of
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people
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used
to commit
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crimes
by
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utilising
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networking
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which leads to difficulties in the
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community
.
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, dearth of privacy on
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social
media,
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some
offenders commit
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crimes
and it not
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only
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effect
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people
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also
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effect
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community
.
To conclude
, although
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networking is a great way of collect
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information
about the world
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but
most of the
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people
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it for performing illegal activities. It is high time
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government
imposed stringent laws against criminals.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that social networks have had a negative impact on people and community.

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