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Some people believe that scientific research should be carried out strictly by government and private companies do not have such a right. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Some people believe that scientific research should be carried out strictly by government and private companies do not have such a right. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience p1lla
It is thought that the government is the only one who can carry out all scientific research, while other private companies do not have the right to announce their research. I completely disagree with that opinion and think that every personal companies surely can carry out the research of their scientist. First of all, these scientists or some private companies worked hard on their own foot just to be recognized. Due to the fact that they spent their entire life to discover new things, new theories and take those results to mankind, so it does not make sense if they can announce their works by themselves. According to the pride of human, to be acknowledged can make us more encouragement to continues our jobs, so do scientists or personal companies. For example, there are many private offices around the world that announced their research not by government, and finally they were encouraged and well-known by others. Thus, giving all private companies the right to carry out their scientific research is extremely meaningful to them. Secondly, there is may some kind of misunderstanding while scientific works were being carried out by government. In the other words, while some private companies convey information about research to government, they might misunderstood or can not catch up what owners mean. Unfortunately, government will announce information to people and next generation may receive information carelessly. For instance, in education, whether the top leader made a blunder by getting Pythagoras theory wrong, the next huge generation will get it wrong. It would have been a sadness in Math, would not it? Therefore, it is really important to let private companies carry out their works, it is not only for owners but also good for the whole mankind. To conclusion, I strongly disagree that give government the right to carry out scientific research of private companies because it is meaningful for scientists to convey their works and also helps people understand clearly the research.
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, while other
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do not have the right to announce their
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. I completely disagree with that opinion and
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that every personal
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of their scientist.

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, these scientists or
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worked
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hard
on their
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own
foot
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to
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. Due to the fact that they spent their entire life to discover new things, new theories and take those results to mankind,
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so
it does not
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sense if they can announce their works by themselves. According to the pride of human, to
be acknowledged
can
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make
us more encouragement to continues our jobs,
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so
do scientists or personal
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companies
.
For example
, there are
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many
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private
offices around the world that announced their
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research
not by
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government
, and
finally
they
were encouraged
and well-known by others.
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, giving all
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private
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companies
the right to
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carry
out their
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scientific
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is
extremely
meaningful to them.

Secondly
, there is may
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kind of misunderstanding while
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works were
being carried
out by
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government
. In the other words, while
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some
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convey information about
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to
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government
, they might
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misunderstood
or can not catch up what owners mean. Unfortunately,
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government
will announce information to
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people
and
next
generation may receive information
carelessly
.
For instance
, in education, whether the top leader made a blunder by getting Pythagoras theory
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wrong
, the
next
huge generation will
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it
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. It would have been a sadness in Math, would not it?
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, it is
really
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to
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out their works, it is not
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only
for owners
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also
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good
for the whole mankind.

To conclusion, I
strongly
disagree that give
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the right to
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out
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scientific
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research
of
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companies
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because
it is meaningful for scientists to convey their works and
also
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helps
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people
understand
clearly
the
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research
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that scientific research should be carried out strictly by government and private companies do not have such a right. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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4 paragraphs
327 words
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