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Many cities around the world have imposed a ban on zoo.Is this positive or negative development.

Many cities around the world have imposed a ban on zoo. Is this positive or negative development. Oyjqj
It is asserted that the zoological gardens have closed in various regions of the entire world by enacted restrictions. This essay will articulate the demerits of this trend. To commence with, there are several justification which prove that why wildlife park are very beneficial for endangered species. The major factor that is control theExtension of enlarge species. To elaborate it, nowadays, deforestation are escalated day by day via Human being due to this the living area of animals and birds are destroyed as well as in the forests animal kill to each other in order to get food. For instance a lion kill the deer for their meal then, not only the food chain is destroyed but also it put effect on other species. That is why, when animals would be keep in zoo areas, this trend can be mitigated. A survey was conducted by national wildlife organisation in 2018, with the help of wild parks and zoos, the counting of various species can be protected. Moreover, another factor that is zoological gardens also put contribution to increase the economy and everyone can get knowledge about diverse wild animals. To explicate it, various types of species: lions, tigers, monkeys, elephants and sparrows can remain safe in zoos. A lot of individuals go there to see the variety of animals and get knowledge about wildlife. Besides this, they have to pay entry fee in reservations and myraid of foreigners visit India every span so the economy of country or particular region also up. For instance, various schools and colleges are organize to see the diversity of animals. Nevertheless students who can learn more about wildlife and make efforts to safe them. To Recapitulate, having aforementioned information it is limited to advocate that eventhough many areas have banned zoo, yet it's benefits for endangered species, country's economy and in students life can not be underestimated.
It
is asserted
that the zoological gardens have closed in
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various
regions of the entire world by enacted restrictions. This essay will articulate the demerits of this trend. To commence with, there are
Possible agreement error. The noun justification seems to be countable; consider using: "several justifications".
several justification
which prove that why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wildlife
park are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beneficial for endangered species. The major factor
that is
control
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theExtension
of enlarge species. To elaborate it, nowadays, deforestation
are escalated
day by day via Human being due to this the living area of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and birds are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroyed
as well
as in the forests
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
kill to each other in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
food.
For instance
a lion kill the deer for their meal then, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the food chain is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroyed
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but
also
it put effect on other species.
That is
why, when
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animals
would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
in zoo areas, this trend can
be mitigated
. A survey
was conducted
by national
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wildlife
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organisation
in 2018, with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of wild parks and zoos, the counting of
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various
species can
be protected
.
Moreover
, another factor
that is
zoological gardens
also
put contribution to increase the economy and everyone can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
knowledge about diverse wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
. To explicate it,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
types of species: lions, tigers, monkeys, elephants and sparrows can remain safe in zoos.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
A lot of
individuals go there to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the variety of
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animals
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
knowledge about
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wildlife
.
Besides
this, they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
pay entry fee in reservations and
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myraid
of foreigners visit India every span
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
the economy of country or particular region
also
up.
For instance
,
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various
schools and colleges are
Consider using a past participle here: "organized".
organize
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the diversity of
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animals
.
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Nevertheless
students who can learn more about
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wildlife
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
efforts to safe them. To Recapitulate, having aforementioned information it
is limited
to advocate that
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eventhough
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
areas have banned zoo,
yet
it's benefits for endangered species, country's economy and in students life can not
be underestimated
.
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IELTS essay Many cities around the world have imposed a ban on zoo. Is this positive or negative development.

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