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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. Op9y
While it has been said that reading books for pleasure rather than watching TV is more beneficial for one’s imagination and acquiring language skills, I contend that the role of the former in boosting intelligence and language ability is equal to the latter. One the one hand, books are instrumental in enhancing children’s imagination and development. A kid reading a fairly tale with illustration will have to think, fantasize and use their creativeness to comprehend ideas and reasoning, which in turn sharpen their mental skills. Moreover, reading books helps to improve languages skills. Spending time reading a book which is not written in our mother tongue leads to the development of a strong language base referring to its vocabulary, or comprehending meaning of a word in different contexts. Besides, reading out a book for children is also an effective way to help them improve their communication skill, which is greatly stimulated as the kids grab a spoken word and use it in daily conversations. On the other hand, watching TV is considered an important activity as reading in order to cultivate one’s imaginativeness regarding its characteristics of programs. Firstly, when audiences watch a tourism channel for example, they are exposed to a wide range of knowledge by seizing images of worldwide landscapes or feel tastes of specialties in various geographical regions. The broadcasting of quiz shows serves as an efficient learning tool for both children and adults who prefer taking challenges which involve critical thinking. Secondly, the role of TV in boosting linguistic competence is pivotal. Recent English programs not only support audience to remember words easily by associating them with vivid images shown on the screen but catch their constant attention with entertaining aspects. In conclusion, while the benefits of reading are undeniable, they cannot outweigh the role of TV in enhancing a person’s imaginativeness and language skills.
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language
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skills
, I contend that the role of the former in boosting intelligence and
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language
ability is equal to the latter.

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the one hand,
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books
are instrumental in enhancing children’s imagination and development. A kid
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reading
a
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fairly tale
with illustration will
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their creativeness to comprehend
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ideas
and reasoning, which in turn sharpen their mental
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skills
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,
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reading
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books
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languages
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skills
. Spending time
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reading
a
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book
which is not written in our mother tongue leads to the development of a strong
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language
base referring to its vocabulary, or comprehending meaning of a word in
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different
contexts.
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,
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out a
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for children is
also
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help
them
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their communication
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, which is
greatly
stimulated as the kids grab a spoken word and
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use
it in daily conversations.

On the other hand
, watching TV
is considered
an
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important
activity as
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reading
in order to cultivate one’s
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imaginativeness
regarding its characteristics of programs.
Firstly
, when audiences
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watch
a tourism channel
for example
, they
are exposed
to a wide range of knowledge by seizing images of worldwide landscapes or feel tastes of specialties in various geographical regions. The broadcasting of quiz
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shows
serves as an efficient learning tool for both children and adults who prefer taking challenges which involve critical thinking.
Secondly
, the role of TV in boosting linguistic competence is pivotal. Recent English programs not
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only
support audience to remember words
easily
by associating them with vivid images shown on the screen
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but
catch their constant attention with entertaining aspects.

In conclusion
, while the benefits of
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reading
are undeniable, they cannot outweigh the role of TV in enhancing a person’s
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imaginativeness
and
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language
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skills
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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