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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. 6A1G
It is said that children should read stories from a book, rather than watch television or play games on the Internet. I completely agree with this point of view that brings more advantages than disadvantages. There are many reasons why reading stories from a book is good for children. First, reading books is a good hobby which is widely encouraged by almost people all over the world. For example, Bill Gates, a billionaire and founder of the biggest software Microsoft, said that books are an important part of his life. Second, through reading stories from a book, the youngster can learn meaningful lessons about the world around them. This means that they can deeply understand how to make life more beautiful and interesting. Finally, reading stories is also a reference source for children to do their homework. They can use good quotes in their assignment which makes their assignment better. Furthermore, reading books also help children to develop brain and broaden their knowledge. For instance, they can advance their imagination by the virtue of reading interesting stories that make them feel excited. In addition, watching television or playing online games is detrimental to their health if they addicted to them, nevertheless, reading books helps them relax and enjoy after a hard day’s learning. Last but not least, reading books also changes a person’s character. In conclusion, on the whole, based on the above discussion, I agree that spending spare time reading stories brings more benefits to children than watching TV or playing computer games.
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is said
that
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children
should read
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stories
from a
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book
,
rather
than
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watch
television or play games on the Internet. I completely
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agree
with this point of view that brings more advantages than disadvantages.

There are
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many
reasons why
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reading
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stories
from a
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book
is
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good
for
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children
.
First
,
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reading
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books
is a
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good
hobby which is
widely
encouraged by almost
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people
all over the world.
For example
, Bill Gates, a billionaire and founder of the biggest software Microsoft, said that
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books
are an
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important
part of his life. Second, through
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reading
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stories
from a
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book
, the youngster can learn meaningful lessons about the world around them. This means that they can
deeply
understand how to
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make
life more
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beautiful
and interesting.
Finally
,
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reading
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stories
is
also
a reference source for
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children
to do their homework. They can
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use
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good
quotes in their assignment which
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makes
their assignment better.

Furthermore
,
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reading
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books
also
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help
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children
to develop brain and broaden their knowledge.
For instance
, they can advance their imagination by the virtue of
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reading
interesting
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stories
that
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make
them feel excited.
In addition
, watching television or playing online games is detrimental to their health if they addicted to them,
nevertheless
,
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reading
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books
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helps
them relax and enjoy after a
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hard
day’s learning. Last
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but
not least,
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reading
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books
also
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changes
a person’s character.

In conclusion
,
on the whole
, based on the above discussion, I
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agree
that spending spare time
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reading
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stories
brings more benefits to
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children
than watching TV or playing computer games.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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