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Some people believe that politicians are more influential than scientists, whilst others believe that scientists have more influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that politicians are more influential than scientists, whilst others believe that scientists have more influence. pRKnD
It is perceived by a group of people that political personnel are more powerful than scientific researchers, whereas another group argues in contrast to this notion. I believe that scientists have more worth in a country in comparison with public servants. This essay will discuss both viewpoints with supportive opinion followed by a reasoned conclusion. A developed country is known by several factors one of them is its technological advancement. In addition, a hi-tech country is considered world’s most powerful country. The key contributor to its technological progress is its scientists. I agree to the belief that scientists are more high-ranking as they solely serve to their country. For instance, USA being a technologically advanced country is able to send its scientists to go to other planets first to the moon and now to mars. Furthermore, their scientific experiments about universe are introducing many astonishing realities to the whole world. Although parliament members play a significant role in policy making of a country and they are meant to serve as public servants but unfortunately, most of them fail to do so. I contradict with the opinion that politicians are more powerful than scientists as most of them prefer themselves over the country. For example, in many developing countries like Pakistan, a number of political members are found guilty in corruption cases that directly affect the economy of the country. In the end, the impression that politicians have more influence over scientists is not worthy. I believe that scientists serve more than politicians that has made scientists more influential. It is suggested that public servants must be selected on merits rather than their powerful background.
It
is perceived
by a group of
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people
that political personnel are more
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powerful
than scientific researchers, whereas another group argues
in contrast
to this notion. I believe that
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scientists
have more worth in a
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country
in comparison
with public servants. This essay will discuss both viewpoints with supportive opinion followed by a reasoned conclusion.

A developed
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country
is known
by several factors one of them is its technological advancement.
In addition
, a hi-tech
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country
is considered
world’s most
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powerful
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country
. The key contributor to its technological progress is its
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scientists
. I
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agree
to the belief that
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scientists
are more high-ranking as they
solely
serve to their
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country
.
For instance
, USA being a
technologically
advanced
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country
is able to
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send
its
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scientists
to go to other planets
first
to the moon and
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now
to
The planet and the god are written with uppercase. 'mars' refers to the verb 'mar' meaning to spoil, or the plural of the noun 'mar' meaning blemishes.
mars
.
Furthermore
, their scientific experiments about universe are introducing
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many
astonishing realities to the whole world.

Although parliament members play a significant role in policy making of a
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
country and
they
are meant
to serve as public servants
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but
unfortunately, most of them fail to do
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so
. I contradict with the opinion that politicians are more
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powerful
than
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scientists
as most of them prefer themselves over the
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country
.
For example
, in
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many
developing
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countries
like Pakistan, a number of political members
are found
guilty in corruption cases that
directly
affect the economy of the country.

In the
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end
, the impression that politicians have more influence over
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scientists
is not worthy. I believe that
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scientists
serve more than politicians that has made
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scientists
more influential. It
is suggested
that public servants
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be selected
on merits
rather
than their
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powerful
background.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that politicians are more influential than scientists, whilst others believe that scientists have more influence.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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