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Some people believe that personal happiness is directly realted to economic success .others argue that happiness depends on different factors discuss both views

Some people believe that personal happiness is directly realted to economic success. others argue that happiness depends on different factors discuss both views arYo
Many individuals say that happiness depends on various factors. but others think that money is important for personal happiness this essay will discuss both the perspectives. However i side with the latter view that other factors are important such as respect in society and good health The first noteworthy aspect is that respect is vital for living in society and for happiness. To support if people have more money and they are rich and they earn a money in a wrong ways like gangstars and mostly political leaders have much money but they do not respect in society as well as individuals do not like them. To cite an example punjab, s former vice chief minister sukhveer singh badal is very rich person But punjab, s community don, t give respect to this pesron they always says this is croupt leader. as a result money is important for happiness but respect is more necessary for living happy in community. The second noteworthy aspect is that good health is main factor of pleasurefull life. To explain with when pupils stay healthy in their societies and in families and do not face any diseases due to this, they do more works and can earn money for better lifestyle. As a example according to survey of 2020 in india 60%people feel more happy which are fit and healthy as compared to rich persons. Thus, health is everything if people do not victims of any disease and they feel more happy without money. However on the other hand money is also important thing for buying anything and completing our needs. In these days people do job and work for their good living standard. so that is why they buy anything with the help of money. for instance, in the main headline of the famous newspaper 60%masses of canada say reasons of their happiness is money. Overall many people think that money is important thing for happiness. To conclude, money is important thing for completing our basic needs and for happy life, but respect and good health is imparetive for happiness as compared to money.
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happiness
depends on various factors.
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but
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money
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important
for personal
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happiness
this essay will discuss both the perspectives.
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i
side with the latter view that other factors are
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important
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respect
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society
and
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good
health

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first
noteworthy aspect is that
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respect
is vital for living in
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society
and for
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happiness
. To support if
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people
have more
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money and
they are
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rich and
they earn a
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money
in a
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ways like
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gangstars
and
mostly
political leaders have much
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money
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but
they do not
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respect
in
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society
as well
as individuals do not like them. To cite an example
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punjab
, s former vice chief minister
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sukhveer
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singh
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badal
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rich person
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punjab
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give
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to this
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they always
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says
this is
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croupt
leader.
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as
a result
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money
is
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important
for
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happiness
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but
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respect
is more necessary for living
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happy
in community.

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good
health is main factor of
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pleasurefull
life. To
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with when pupils stay healthy in their
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societies
and in families and do not face any diseases due to this, they do more works and can earn
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money
for better lifestyle. As
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example according to survey of 2020 in
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india
60%
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people
feel more
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which
are fit
and healthy as compared to rich persons.
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, health is everything if
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people
do not victims of any
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disease and
they feel more
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happy
without money.

However
on the other hand
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money
is
also
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important
thing for buying anything and completing our needs.

In these days
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people
do job and work for their
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good
living standard.
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so
that is
why they
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buy
anything with the
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help
of
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money
.
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instance, in the main headline of the
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newspaper 60%masses of
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canada
say reasons of their
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happiness
is
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.
Overall
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people
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is
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thing for happiness.

To conclude
,
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is
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important
thing for completing our basic needs and for
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happy
life,
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but
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and
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health is
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for
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IELTS essay Some people believe that personal happiness is directly realted to economic success. others argue that happiness depends on different factors discuss both views

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
350 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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