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Some people believe that passports are essential as a way of regulating the population of countries. Others believe they should be abolished and we should be able to travel where we like. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

Some people believe that passports are essential as a way of regulating the population of countries. Others believe they should be abolished and we should be able to travel where we like. rL7rk
There is a widely-held belief that passports are central to control the population of a country. The issue, however, is by no means straightforward, and arguments can also be made against this stipulation. I think using passports could be beneficial if used just for very critical matters. On the one hand, there are some good reasons for requiring passports. To start with, governments' policies are often formulated based on the number of citizens, and this means there should be strict control through passports. Basic healthcare and education, for instance, which are the essential services in almost every country, may well be provided as long as policy makers have an official statistic regarding the population. Furthermore, passport controls are crucial to minimizing the risk of terrorism and crime on the grounds that those with criminal records may be spotted and hence denied admission. On the other hand, others call for the abolition of passports, contending that there should not be any limitation on travel. They point to the fact that it is eliminating passports that can promote equality in the world. It would not be fair if some travelers are deprived of traveling to some countries just because of their nationality or religion, and examples of this can be observed for Muslims who are not able to go to America. They argue, moreover, that scrapping passports would open doors to tourism and consequently result in a boost in the economy of those counties whose passport dynamics used to impede this industry. With both advantages and disadvantages with the abolition of passports, I am of the opinion that the best course of action for policy makers is to reserve passports for very specific cases such as combating terrorism and crime, providing better service to citizens and so on.
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passports
are central to control the population of a country. The issue,
however
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be made
against this stipulation. I
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using
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critical matters.

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some
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good
reasons for requiring
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passports
. To
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start
with,
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governments
' policies are
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often
formulated based on the number of citizens, and this means there should be strict control through
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passports
. Basic healthcare and education,
for instance
, which are the essential services in almost every country, may well
be provided
as long as
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policy makers
have an official statistic regarding the population.
Furthermore
,
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passport
controls are crucial to minimizing the
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risk
of terrorism and crime on the grounds that those with criminal records may
be spotted
and
hence
denied admission.

On the other hand
, others call for the abolition of
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passports
, contending that there should not be any limitation on travel. They point to the fact that it is eliminating
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passports
that can promote equality in the world. It would not be
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fair
if
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some
travelers
are deprived
of traveling to
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some
countries
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just
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because
of their nationality or religion, and examples of this can
be observed
for Muslims who are not able to go to America. They argue,
moreover
, that scrapping
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passports
would open doors to tourism and
consequently
result in a boost in the economy of those counties whose
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passport
dynamics
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used
to impede this industry.

With both advantages and disadvantages with the abolition of
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passports
, I am of the opinion that the best course of action for
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
policy makers
is to reserve
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passports
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
specific cases such as combating terrorism and crime, providing better service to citizens and
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so
on.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that passports are essential as a way of regulating the population of countries. Others believe they should be abolished and we should be able to travel where we like.

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