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some people believe that parents soulddevote more tiome to helping their children with schoolwork. Others thinks that they should allcocate more time to playing sports with their kids. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is said that parents should spend an inscresing of numorous time to assist their children with schoolwork. Other people argue that thay should share more time to play sports with their kids. In this essay, I will discuss both point of views and give my opinion. Nowaday, the studying program at school is too hard, heavy for the children. The teacher give them too many homeworks. In other to complete the exercises perfectly, the kids must study hard, concentrate to listen to the lectures clearly in class. Moreover, their parents are too busy with all things: work, house chore, take care of different child…. so they only can help them explain their homework if their children can not understand them clearly. They must be try their best to complete workschool by themselves. This help them more independent in their studying, In my opinion, I trusthful think that people should spend a lot of spare time to play sports with their children. Because the kids may under a lot of pressure on school so playing a sports will help them relax, healthier. It is very useful for their physic and mind. For example, playing chess or studying a music instrument or playing outdoor activities help the kids develop their brain. They become more intelligent so they learn better, fall asleep easily and improve their memory abilities. Because of too much benefics, I support the parents should share more time to play with their kids to encourage them. In conclusion, it is necessary for parents to spend more time to play sports together to develop both physic and mental for children.
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is said
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should spend an
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of
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numorous
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time
to assist their
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children
with schoolwork. Other
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people
argue that
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thay
should share more
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time
to
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play
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sports
with their
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kids
. In this essay, I will discuss both point of views and give my opinion.

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Nowaday
, the studying program at school is too
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hard
, heavy for the
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children
. The teacher give them too
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many
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homeworks
. In other to complete the exercises
perfectly
, the
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kids
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must
study
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hard
, concentrate to listen to the lectures
clearly
in
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class
.
Moreover
, their
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parents
are too busy with all things: work,
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house
chore, take care of
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different
child….
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so
they
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only
can
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help
them
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explain
their homework if their
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children
can not understand them
clearly
. They
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must
be
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try
their best to complete
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workschool
by themselves. This
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help
them more independent in their studying,

In my opinion, I
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trusthful
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think
that
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people
should spend
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a lot of
spare
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time
to
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play
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sports
with their
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children
.
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Because
the
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kids
may under
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a lot of
pressure on school
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so
playing a
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sports
will
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help
them relax, healthier. It is
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very
useful for their physic and mind.
For example
, playing chess or studying a music instrument or playing outdoor activities
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help
the
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kids
develop their brain. They become more intelligent
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so
they learn better, fall asleep
easily
and
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improve
their memory abilities.
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of too much
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benefics
, I support the
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parents
should share more
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time
to
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play
with their
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kids
to encourage them.

In conclusion
, it is necessary for
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parents
to spend more
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time
to
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play
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sports
together to develop both physic and mental for
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children
.
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IELTS essay some people believe that parents soulddevote more tiome to helping their children with schoolwork. Others thinks that they should allcocate more time to playing sports with their kids.

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  American English
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