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Nowadays manymothers take care of the family and don’t go out to work. Some people believethey should be given salaries by the government. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays manymothers take care of the family and don’t go out to work. Some people believethey should be given salaries by the government. 7aMR3
In this currentera, the numerous women stay home and take care of their families. However, theyare not going to work out. Society thinks that the government ought to give someamount of money to them. I, therefore, partially agree with the given statement. To embark, the authorities should provide salaries to women who are not working and more theyare taking care of families.   For well-beingof their children, if the government allows money per month, so it would be betterfor them. The reason behind it, some women are widowed, so receiving grants isfruitful. Furthermore, with the help of that money, they can save some money andfull-fill their whole families dreams as well. Some little amount of money canhelp for house expenses and other expenses. For instance, in the USA, in developedcountries, their government provides money per month to all women for their life.  On the otherhand, women can make money by themselves.  In family, men can produce money, soauthorities do not need to provide money. Due to waste money, some women wasteor spend money in the wrong manner, which they do not need. Women are enoughcapable to make money. they have power or stamina to do it. As long as, governmentgive money as an income, women feel boring and become lethargic to do work. Moreover, in course of time, they might quit job due to that fact that not only they becomefully rely on it but also, they become more independent. To exemplify, accordingto MA – Money Authority, they spoke that in those countries who give money to women, their women are becoming more sluggish and leave jobs and live lavish lives.  To recapitulate, in my view, the government have to give money to women who really need financialaid and in some case like widow women. Likewise, if women know the value of moneyso they should be given wages. But, at the end, women are no longer spent moneyin waste things, then and that this idea is best for them to live their lifepeacefully and in an easy mode.
In this
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currentera
, the numerous
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women
stay home and take care of their
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families
.
However
,
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theyare
not going to work out. Society
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thinks
that the
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government
ought to give
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someamount
of
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money
to them. I,
therefore
,
partially
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agree
with the
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given
statement. To embark, the authorities should provide salaries to
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women
who are not working and more
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theyare
taking care of
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families
.
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For
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well-beingof
their children, if the
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government
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allows
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money
per month,
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so
it would be
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betterfor
them. The reason behind it,
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some
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women
are widowed
,
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so
receiving grants
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isfruitful
.
Furthermore
, with the
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help
of that
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money
, they can save
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some
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money
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andfull-fill
their whole
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families
dreams
as well
.
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Some
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little
amount of
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money
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canhelp
for
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house
expenses and other expenses.
For instance
, in the USA, in
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developedcountries
, their
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government
provides
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money
per month to all
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women
for their life.  On the
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otherhand
,
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women
can
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make
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money
by themselves.  In
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family
,
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men
can produce
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money
,
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soauthorities
do not need to provide
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money
. Due to waste
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money
,
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some
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women
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wasteor
spend
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money
in the
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wrong
manner, which they do not need.
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are
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enoughcapable
to
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make
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money
.
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they
have power or stamina to do it. As long as,
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governmentgive
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money
as an income,
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women
feel boring and become lethargic to do work.
Moreover
, in course of time, they might quit job due to that fact that not
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only
they
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becomefully
rely on it
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but
also
, they become more independent. To exemplify,
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accordingto
MA
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–
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Authority, they spoke that in those countries who give
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money
to
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women
, their
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women
are becoming more sluggish and
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leave
jobs and
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live
lavish
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lives
.  To recapitulate, in my view, the
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government
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have to
give
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money
to
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women
who
really
need
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financialaid
and in
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some
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case
like widow
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women
.
Likewise
, if
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women
know the value of
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moneyso
they should be
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given
wages.
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But
, at the
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end
,
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women
are no longer spent
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moneyin
waste things, then and that this
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idea
is best for them to
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live
their
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lifepeacefully
and
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in an easy mode
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IELTS essay Nowadays manymothers take care of the family and don’t go out to work. Some people believethey should be given salaries by the government.

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