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Some people believe that parents should teach children how to be a good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that parents should teach children how to be a good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. LrGNG
It is argued that parents ought to tech children how to be a good member of society. Whereas, others think that schools are the palce where children should learn this. Although Parents are the one who know their children better than anyone, in schools, pupils can profoundly learn this by performing voluntary work. This essay agrees with the former view. Parents are the who know their children very well. All children have different and individual personality. In order for better understanding about social skills, parents can teach children by only theoretical way and not by practical way. However, nowadays, it becomes impossible for parents do not spend much time with their children, due to the workloads. That is why, this essay disagrees that children should be taught from parents. Moreover, schools can teach children by organizing voluntary service, where children can overwhelming participate and assist to society and each other. Therefore, this essay believes that schools should be the one who take responbility for this. For instance, according to a study, in India, schools often persuade children to participate in voluntary service, where children yield to participate in order to achieve good marks in the final exam. To conclude, despite that Parents should take responbility to teach children how to become avoid member of society, schools can teach them by enforcing children.
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palce
where
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children
should learn this. Although
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are the one who know their
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children
better than anyone, in
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schools
, pupils can
profoundly
learn this by performing voluntary work. This essay
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agrees
with the former view.
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are the who know their
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children
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very
well. All
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children
have
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different
and individual personality. In order for better understanding about social
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skills
,
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parents
can
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teach
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children
by
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only
theoretical way and not by practical way.
However
, nowadays, it becomes impossible for
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parents
do not spend much time with their
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children
, due to the workloads.
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why, this essay disagrees that
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children
should
be taught
from
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parents
.
Moreover
,
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schools
can
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teach
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children
by organizing voluntary service, where
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children
can overwhelming participate and assist to society and each other.
Therefore
, this essay believes that
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schools
should be the one who take
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responbility
for this.
For instance
, according to a study, in India,
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schools
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often
persuade
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children
to participate in voluntary service, where
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children
yield to participate in order to achieve
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good
marks in the final exam.
To conclude
, despite that
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Parents
should take
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responbility
to
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teach
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children
how to become avoid member of society,
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schools
can
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teach
them by enforcing
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children
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that parents should teach children how to be a good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

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