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Some people believe that parents should pay their children a small amount of money do jobs around the home (such as washing the dishes or taking out the garbage )while others disagree? Discuss the both these views and give your opinion ?

Some people believe that parents should pay their children a small amount of money do jobs around the home (such as washing the dishes or taking out the garbage )while others disagree? Discuss the both these views and give your opinion? XBpN
In today’s era, parents spend a lot of money on their children extravagant facilities but they won’t give credit to the children when they do house hold activities such as washing dishes or taking garbage’s so I personally believe that people should give some money to children when they do some work at home; therefore, I disagree with this notion and I will delve the explicate my view point in upcoming paragraph. First and foremost, children are great nurture by god. When they grow with good intention so they develop with good human being. If we don’t give credit when they do small things we can mislead them and in that case they can steal the money instead of they can understand the value of money after the work. For example, there are two children, one is from rich family and one is from middle class family when their parents do shopping of toys they actually bought same price of toys but rich boy doesn’t take care of their toys and on the other hand, second child knows the value of money and he will keep take care of that things because their parents teach them the value of money. So as a result if we make them understand the value of money to give some small credit they will understand one day. Although, if we agree to this statement we can actually understand the behavior of our children from the beginning of their developing character. They can fully covered their small needs or either they can go into the bad company just to show off their money. To elaborate my point, children should do some sort of work at home and some times to give hands to their parents at house. For this they can learn to manage the time or grow with some skills. In recapitulate, I would like to ingeminate that doing children should do some tasks with credit at home is not that bad thing. Consequently they will grow with down to earth. It can help the family members and they know their responsibility from childhood. In the society, this think will grow in the society with special jobs to particular person to help to improve the society.
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money
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children
extravagant facilities
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they won’t
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give
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credit
to the
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children
when they do
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hold activities such as washing dishes or taking garbage’s
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personally
believe that
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people
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give
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some
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money
to
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children
when they do
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some
work at home;
therefore
, I disagree with this notion and I will delve
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my view point in upcoming paragraph.

First
and foremost,
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children
are great nurture by god. When they
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grow
with
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good
intention
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they develop with
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human being. If we don’t
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give
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credit
when they do
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small
things we can mislead them and
in that case
they can steal the
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money
instead
of they can
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understand
the
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value
of
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money
after the work.
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, there are two
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children
, one is from rich family and one is from middle
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class
family when their
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parents
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do shopping
of toys they actually
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same price of toys
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rich boy doesn’t take care of their toys and
on the other hand
, second child knows the
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value
of
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money and
he will
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keep
take care of that things
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because
their
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parents
teach them the
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value
of
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money
.
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as a result
if we
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them
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understand
the
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to
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small
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they will
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understand
one day.

Although, if we
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to this statement we can actually
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the behavior of our
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children
from the beginning of their developing character. They can
fully
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their
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needs or either they can go into the
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company
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to
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off their
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money
. To elaborate my point,
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children
should do
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sort of work at home and
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times to
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hands to their
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at
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. For this they can learn to manage the time or
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some
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skills
.

In recapitulate, I would like to
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ingeminate
that doing
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children
should do
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some
tasks with
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credit
at home is not that
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bad
thing.
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Consequently
they will
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grow
with down to earth. It can
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help
the family
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members and
they know their responsibility from childhood. In the society, this
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will
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grow
in the society with special jobs to particular person to
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help
to
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improve
the society.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that parents should pay their children a small amount of money do jobs around the home (such as washing the dishes or taking out the garbage )while others disagree? Discuss the both these views and give your opinion?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
372 words
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