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Some people believe that online shopping is convenient while other believe that conventional shopping is more beneficial

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Shopping is the necessity of the life is debated in popular media across the globe. It is often argued by some that online shopping saves precious time. Meanwhile, the other still claims that shopping from physical located stores to experience the physical appearance of the product. However, I believe that buying from physical stores or online both can be beneficial. This essay will explore both sides of the argument before discussing my opinion. On the one hand, the supporters of the idea that shopping from online platforms are beneficial because it saves time. As an online platform offers a wider range of inventory in a matter of few clicks makes customer to buy essential items in a matter of seconds. Take an example of the United Kingdom, by 2025, the online shopping takes the edge on any other platform because of emerging technology. Thus, online buying saves time rapidly increasing as well as. While on the other hand, the advocates of the view that shopping from conventional store is extremely beneficial due to product physical appearance. As in physical located stores, customers get to know the proper description through salesman also people can hold the product in their hand. Take an example of Southern California, where a report by Ministry of commerce clearly shows that people are happier to buy products by its physical appearance. Hence, the physical shopping gives the customer to experience the product. Whereas, I believe that online shopping and shopping from physical located stores both are beneficial because they saves precious time and gives customer physical appearance of the product as well as. To sum up, even though online shopping is emerging technology while conventional shopping gives customer great approach to the product
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. This essay will explore both sides of the argument
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essential items in a matter of seconds. Take an example of the United Kingdom, by 2025, the
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online
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takes the edge on any other platform
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to experience the product.

Whereas, I believe that
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from
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To sum up,
even though
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is emerging technology while conventional
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gives
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great approach to the
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IELTS essay Some people believe that online shopping is convenient while other believe that conventional shopping is more beneficial

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
286 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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