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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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We live in a world which has been tremendously shaped by the unparalleled advancements of technology and globalisation which in turn have revolutionised the way we live and make our choices- both little and big. Without any doubt, we have an incredible number of alternatives to pick from and this freedom of choice has enriched our lifestyle in the best possible way and it has also increased the global resources. The advancement of technology has enabled us to get accurate information from the internet anytime we want. We have an unimaginable number of resources online that we can access instantly and this freedom enables us to make informed decisions in every step in our life. We can decide what should be our next holiday destination, which store offers our favourites merchandise at a cheaper price, which university offers an online degree that we need and thus the potential to enrich our lives with the help of technology is virtually limitless. Other technological advancements have enabled us to grow more crops, cook new dishes, preserve them and reduce the world’s hunger issue more conveniently. In the present era, technology and globalisation and their benefits have exponentially expanded the number of options we can avail in different fields like education, food, transport, treatment, entertainment, jobs and business. For example, the number of majors a university offers and the related jobs and business opportunities in the future are incredible. We can enter in jobs that were never offered in the past and not to mention the impact of business opportunities due to globalisation and widespread acceptance of it. Moreover, we can produce crops and vegetables around the year and effective preservation methods have benefitted human population with the provision of significant types of edibles during the entire year. Faster transportation system leads to a revolution in transport hubs around the world and we can visit our friends and family more frequently than ever before and talk to them anytime we want no matter the distance. In conclusion, we are blessed with so many options to pick from in this modern era and the innovation of technology is increasing the list day by day. We should just be careful and prudent enough to choose the best for us in personal life and for the entire human race for our overall progress.
We
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live
in a world which has been
tremendously
shaped by the unparalleled advancements of
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technology
and
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globalisation
which in turn have
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revolutionised
the way we
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live
and
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make
our choices- both
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little
and
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big
. Without any doubt, we have an incredible
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number
of alternatives to pick from and this freedom of choice has enriched our lifestyle in the best possible way and it has
also
increased the global resources.

The advancement of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
has enabled us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
accurate information from the internet anytime we want. We have an unimaginable
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number
of resources online that we can access
instantly
and this freedom enables us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
informed decisions in every step in our life. We can decide what should be our
next
holiday destination, which store offers our
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favourites
merchandise at a cheaper price, which university offers an online degree that we need and
thus
the potential to enrich our
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lives
with the
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help
of
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technology
is
virtually
limitless. Other technological advancements have enabled us to grow more crops, cook new dishes, preserve them and
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reduce
the world’s hunger issue more
conveniently
.

In the present era,
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technology
and
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globalisation
and their benefits have
exponentially
expanded the
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number
of options we can avail in
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different
fields like education, food, transport, treatment, entertainment, jobs and business.
For example
, the
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number
of majors a university offers and the related jobs and business opportunities in the future are incredible. We can enter in jobs that were never offered in the past and not to mention the impact of business opportunities due to
Possible spelling mistake. 'globalisation' is British English.
globalisation
and widespread acceptance of it.
Moreover
, we can produce crops and vegetables around the year and effective preservation methods have
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benefitted
human population with the provision of significant types of edibles during the entire year. Faster transportation system leads to a revolution in transport hubs around the
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world and
we can visit our friends and family more
frequently
than ever
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before
and talk to them anytime we want no matter the distance.

In conclusion
, we
are blessed
with
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so
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many
options to pick from in this modern era and the innovation of
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technology
is increasing the list day by day. We should
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just
be careful and prudent
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enough
to choose the best for us in personal life and for the entire human race for our
overall
progress.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
387 words
6.0
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