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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? qVL6d
As the world is modernizing and the technology is advancing, people can enjoy choices in every aspect of their day-to-day activities, like foods, shelters, clothes, fashions etcetera. I completely agree with this proposition. The advancement had led people with numerous choices in the medical sector, either big or small. To clarify, if a person is unable to afford an expensive hospital for their treatment, then they can easily find an affordable hospital due to the variety of choices that we have been blessed with. Likewise, choices have influenced the lifestyle of people like clothing, dining, watching movies and many more. For example, if a person prefers a cold drink then they are presented with a myriad of choices for drinks as Coke, Pepsi, Fanta etcetera. Moreover, not only medical and lifestyle-related choices have increased but people can also select a career from a diverse number of choices. Even the choices of negative aspect are numerous. What I mean is these are also the choices that a person can enjoy even it is not beneficial for health. Furthermore, choices can be made to reside in many foreign nations also. For instances, people can reside in any nation permitted by their country and can enjoy their life and work in that particular country and even have a chance of being a permanent residence in that country. All is this is possible due to the excessive choice that people can enjoy today. To conclude, I believe that along with technology and modernization, the choices regarding various aspects are growing, but it is up to the people how they would make and enjoy their choices.
As the world is modernizing and the technology is advancing,
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choices
in every aspect of their day-to-day activities, like foods, shelters, clothes, fashions etcetera. I completely
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agree
with this proposition.

The advancement had led
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people
with numerous
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choices
in the medical sector, either
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big
or
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small
. To clarify, if a person is unable to afford an expensive hospital for their treatment, then they can
easily
find an affordable hospital due to the variety of
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choices
that we have
been blessed
with.
Likewise
,
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choices
have influenced the lifestyle of
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people
like clothing, dining, watching movies and
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many
more.
For example
, if a person prefers a
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cold
drink then they
are presented
with a myriad of
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choices
for drinks as Coke, Pepsi,
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Fanta
etcetera.
Moreover
, not
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only
medical and lifestyle-related
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choices
have increased
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but
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people
can
also
select a career from a diverse number of choices.

Even the
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choices
of
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negative
aspect are numerous. What I mean is these are
also
the
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that a person can
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enjoy
even it is not beneficial for health.
Furthermore
,
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choices
can
be made
to reside in
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many
foreign nations
also
. For instances,
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people
can reside in any nation permitted by their country and can
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enjoy
their life and work in that particular country and even have a chance of being a permanent residence in that country. All is this is possible due to the excessive
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choice
that
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people
can
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enjoy
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today
.

To conclude
, I believe that along with technology and modernization, the
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choices
regarding various aspects are growing,
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but
it is up to the
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people
how they would
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make
and
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enjoy
their
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choices
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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