Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. to what extent do you agree of disagree with this statement? v. 109 v.35

some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. v. 109 v. 35
Over the recent years, is though from people that ability of having more choices than expected is on due, therefore people have too many of them. Despite the impacts of both sides, may be beneficial or not, I tend to agree with the statement, in today's world there are many more choices than a few years ago. First of all, in our lives are many choices for ranges of aspects. That means, people have the ability to choose between a range of things, even particularly simple products that can be found in the supermarket. From my experience, I rather to shop in the groceries and having a look to all the product's selling than having only one to choose. This can be interpreted such as a feeling of freedom that people can choose what they want avoiding the fact that they have to buy particularly products. Secondly, those days people are able to enjoy their life as they want from choosing the countries and cities they want to live to having the choice to present their self as they want. For instance, my best friend she was born a boy and actually she was feeling a lot the girly side. Therefore, in her teenage she had the choice to change her gender and to become a girl which obviously she like it much. As a result of this, having options to be whatever it is making the person feel good, is very beneficial in those days. To conclude, all the above are simply ideas that explain how important is to have many options in our lives, which before years, couldn't be possible. However, that doesn't mean there are not any negative impacts, but for sure having these abilities in our lives is essentials without having them from long time.
Over the recent years, is though from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
that ability of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
having
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
is on due,
therefore
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of them. Despite the impacts of both sides, may be beneficial or not, I tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the statement, in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
's world there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
than a few years ago.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
for ranges of aspects. That means,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have the ability to choose between a range of things, even
particularly
simple products that can
be found
in the supermarket. From my experience, I
rather
to shop in the groceries and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
having
a look to all the product's selling than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
having
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one to choose. This can
be interpreted
such as a feeling of freedom that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can choose what they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
avoiding the fact that they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
particularly
products.

Secondly
, those days
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are able to enjoy their life as they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
from choosing the countries and cities they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
live
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
having
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choice
to present their self as they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
.
For instance
, my best friend she
was born
a boy and actually she was feeling a lot the
girly
side.
Therefore
, in her teenage she had the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choice
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
her gender and to become a girl which
obviously
she like it much.
As a result
of this,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
having
options to be whatever it is making the person feel
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
, is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beneficial in those days.

To conclude
, all the above are
simply
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
is to have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
options in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
, which
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
years, couldn't be possible.
However
, that doesn't mean there are not any
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impacts,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
for sure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
having
these abilities in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
is essentials without
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
having
them from long time.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. v. 109 v. 35

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts