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It is said that our daily lives are teeming with choices because of the significant industrial and technological development which occurred the last several decades. Although I agree with this idea to some extent if you live in an urban are, it’s not always the case for those in countryside. On the one hand, people living in a big city are now tired of the situation that is snowed under with too many choices you have to make. Take online shopping for example, there are not only many websites where you buy things, but also each websites has enormous variety of products for one type of thing you are planning to buy. As a result, people are struggling to choose a specific thing and they end up wasting large amount of time. Another example is that it’s getting more challenging to reach trust-worthy information. This is because there are so many mass media that some of them broadcast fake news which confuse people who are well educated enough to judge what is true and what is not. On the other hand, people living in a rural area don’t always appreciate the development. There was an article saying that recently the number of people who move out of city to seek for laid-back life style in a small town had been increasing. According to the paper, it is because people feel more comfortable in the environment with less options and decisions to make. Actually, there are even places in my country where no Internet is available. Surely, compared to urban people, those who live in countryside don’t have many choices in their life. In conclusion, I don’t think the situation that you have too many choices don’t always apply to everyone. However it depends on where you live.
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is said
that our daily
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lives
are teeming with
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choices
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because
of the significant industrial and technological development which occurred the last several decades. Although I
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agree
with this
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idea
to
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some
extent if you
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live
in an urban are, it’s not always the case for those in countryside.

On the one hand,
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people
living in a
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big
city are
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now
tired of the situation that
is snowed
under with too
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many
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choices
you
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have to
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make
. Take online shopping
for example
, there are not
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only
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many
websites where you
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buy
things,
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but
also
each
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websites
has enormous variety of products for one type of thing you are planning to
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buy
.
As a result
,
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people
are struggling to choose a specific
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thing and
they
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end
up wasting large amount of time. Another example is that it’s getting more challenging
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to reach
trust-worthy information. This is
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because
there are
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so
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many
mass media that
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some
of them broadcast fake news which confuse
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people
who are
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well educated
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enough
to judge what is true and what is not.

On the other hand
,
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people
living in a rural area don’t always appreciate the development. There was an article saying that recently the number of
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people
who
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move
out of city to seek for laid-back life style in a
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small
town had been increasing. According to the paper, it is
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because
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people
feel more comfortable in the environment with
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less
options and decisions to
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make
. Actually, there are even places in my country where no Internet is available.
Surely
, compared to urban
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people
, those who
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live
in countryside don’t have
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many
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choices
in their life.

In conclusion
, I don’t
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think
the situation that you have too
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many
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choices
don’t always apply to everyone.
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However
it depends on where you
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live
.
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IELTS essay some people believe that nowadas

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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