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In contemporary times, a group of people have an opinion that there are various jobs or businesses related professions. The professions available in regard to the ever-increasing population of the world, I completely agree with the statement that there are too many choices regarding career. This essay will argue why I believe these choices give more options to people. Firstly, more career options give people diversity in their choices. They can pursue one career and change it to another career if a person does not feel any accomplishments according to their set goals they want to achieve. Jeff Bezos is a prime example; he had a lucrative career in computer science on Wall Street before transitioning into the world of E-Commerce and launching amazon. Secondly, the increasing population of the world is causing many people to become jobless because the world population has been growing rapidly and more people are not finding a job to pursue their career goals. Most people cannot afford to do business so they have to get a job. In Pakistan, many people are jobless and are struggling financially because of it. The government promised many jobs but is struggling to do so. In conclusion, the diversity of choices in career is always helpful and more jobs are important to people can pursue their career goals. There is no question that there should be different career choices in modern times. In modern times, the more career related choices individuals have the more people will achieve their goals and progress through to higher ranks.
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have an opinion that there are various
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or businesses related professions. The professions available in regard to the ever-increasing population of the
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world
, I completely
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with the statement that there are too
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regarding
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. This essay will argue why I believe these
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give more options to
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.

Firstly
, more
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options give
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diversity in their
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choices
. They can pursue one
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and
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it to another
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if a person does not feel any accomplishments according to their set
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they want to achieve. Jeff Bezos is a prime example; he had a lucrative
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career
in computer science on Wall Street
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transitioning into the
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of E-Commerce and launching
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amazon
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, the increasing population of the
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is causing
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to become jobless
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the
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population has been growing
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are not finding a
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to pursue their
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. Most
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cannot afford to do business
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they
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In conclusion
, the diversity of
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in
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is always helpful and more
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are
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to
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can pursue their
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. There is no question that there should be
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in modern times. In modern times, the more
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related
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individuals have the more
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will achieve their
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and progress through to higher ranks.
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IELTS essay some people believe that nowadaces.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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