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Shopping has been become common habit in all young stars because, they want to show off to their friends and community. This eassy will discuss why they do that and how they can stay away from it in forthcoming paragraphs. Commencing with, there are several reasons behind it Firstly, they chosed to wear branded clothes as well as they want to look like a celebrity and become more attractive. Moreover, thesedays development of world as well as the variety of clothes has increased. Although, there are less expensive clothes shops are also available in markets, but they want to go supper market such as big brand shop and so on. Moving further, the amount of their other things are also increased food and their other need necessary things. For instance, a international clothes manufacturing company reveal their data more adults are preferred their cloths as compare to other age group. On the other hand, there are more kind of activities they can do and away from the trend which are they see on Internet and social media. The government should be provide more facilities to youth as well as adults Moreover, they ought to made lush green grounds, stadium and also apply gym facilities in their home town. Which will be bost up their stamina and energy and they can spend they more time in gym by doing exercise. Furthermore, most advertisements should be on related to youngstar life. Which will be being inspiration for them. In result, they show their more interest in games. In conclusion, give aforementioned information is quite evident that youngstar should stay happy with their parents and so they will be increased their bonding with each other. Then they away from other useless things

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