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Some people believe that living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory has many advantages while others say that it has many disadvantages.

Some people believe that living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory has many advantages while others say that it has many disadvantages. ElJdq
After getting admitted to a university, students need to decide where to live, and this choice severely affects their academic performance and student life. While many disciples choose university halls, others opt to live in an apartment, and it has both benefits and demerits. This essay examines both advantages and disadvantages of living in a separate apartment than living in a university residence. Personally, I would prefer to live in a university residence. Living in an apartment offers many distinct advantages, and privacy is one of them. While a student in a dormitory has little privacy, someone in an apartment enjoys far better privacy and freedom. Learners who live in an independent house can choose a quiet neighbourhood, and this environment is conducive for studying attentively. Furthermore, living in an apartment makes students more independent, and they can choose a better diet. For instance, one of my cousins moved to an apartment after living in a university dormitory for about six months, and he did so because he hated the food offered in his university canteen. Having said that, living in an apartment rather than a university dormitory has some visible disadvantages. First and foremost is the cost. In my country, living in an apartment is quite expensive while the university offers cheap accommodation. The food is also cheaper in the university dining halls. Second, renting an apartment in my city is hard for a student. The landlords prefer families over the students. Furthermore, the daily commuting is convenient from the university halls while not so easy from the apartments away from the university campus. Finally, campus staying students have better interaction with seniors and teachers. In conclusion, even though there are many benefits of living in an apartment than living in a university hall, I would still prefer to live in the university dormitory. The primary reason for me to be able to attend my classes without commuting through bad traffics. I hate to wait in the heavy traffic and as I do not own a car. I would also like to enjoy my university life and stay in touch with my seniors, teachers and classmates whenever possible. University life has so many things to offer, and I do not want to miss them.
After getting admitted to a
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university
,
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students
need to decide where to
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live
, and this choice
severely
affects their academic performance and
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student
life. While
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many
disciples choose
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university
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halls
, others opt to
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live
in an
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apartment
, and it has both benefits and demerits. This essay examines both advantages and disadvantages of
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living
in a separate
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apartment
than
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living
in a
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university
residence.
Personally
, I would prefer to
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live
in a
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university
residence.

Living in an
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apartment
offers
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many
distinct advantages, and privacy is one of them. While a
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student
in a
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dormitory
has
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little
privacy, someone in an
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apartment
enjoys far better privacy and freedom. Learners who
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live
in an independent
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house
can choose a quiet
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neighbourhood
, and this environment is conducive for studying
attentively
.
Furthermore
,
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living
in an
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apartment
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makes
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students
more independent, and they can choose a better diet.
For instance
, one of my cousins
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moved
to an
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apartment
after
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living
in a
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university
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dormitory
for about six months, and he did
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so
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because
he hated the food offered in his
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university
canteen.

Having said that,
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living
in an
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apartment
rather
than a
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university
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dormitory
has
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some
visible disadvantages.
First
and foremost is the cost. In my country,
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living
in an
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apartment
is quite expensive while the
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university
offers
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cheap
accommodation. The food is
also
cheaper in the
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university
dining
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halls
. Second, renting an
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apartment
in my city is
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hard
for a
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student
. The landlords prefer families over the
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students
.
Furthermore
, the daily commuting is convenient from the
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university
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halls
while not
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so
easy from the
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apartments
away from the
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university
campus.
Finally
, campus staying
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students
have better interaction with seniors and teachers.

In conclusion
,
even though
there are
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many
benefits of
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living
in an
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apartment
than
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living
in a
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university
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hall
, I would
still
prefer to
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live
in the
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university
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dormitory
. The primary reason for me to be able to attend my classes without commuting through
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bad
traffics. I hate to wait in the heavy traffic and as I do not
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own
a car. I would
also
like to enjoy my
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university
life and stay in touch with my seniors, teachers and classmates whenever possible.
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University
life has
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so
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many
things to offer, and I do not want to miss them.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory has many advantages while others say that it has many disadvantages.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
375 words
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