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“Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views.”

“Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. ” Xg8g
It is acknowledged that people have different views on zoos, some of them believe that cities need an animal park in terms of economic, amusement so on, others claim that zoos destroyed animals which are taken into zoos just for their benefits, that has remained controversial issue, i will compare and interpret over those sides On the one hand. There is an undeniable reasons why we keep animals in zoos, first, the nature has a great deal of animals and they inhabit in all corners of the world, therefore, zoos offer people get to know animals and meet their curiosity, for instance, my city has an zoo where is located in forest and a little far from city, when i got there i saw may different kinds of animals, consequently i have several news information about animals duo to the zoo, second, it contributes to inject animals love to our children as well as close looking a variety of wild animals, in addition, children get the grab of chance to broaden their horizon and improve their way of thinking about animals, last, it also helps animals which have wounds and deases, and it feed local economic situation, for example, whoever visit any zoo they left there money so they can see them On the other hand, zoos have an detrimental effect on wind animals such as, make animal cozy, lose their ability of surviving in the wild nature. Another issue is that opinion to build zoos open doors to men who use this opportunity to carry on animals trafficking such as elephant teeth’s on account of given permission to collect animals for zoos, in addition, everything is beautiful in where it belongs, zoos is against the animal rights, it may take as torture to animals to keep them in cages. And also men of science has been telling, we have to keep our distends from wild world in terms of preventing humans illness which conveys from animals to people In conclusion, whether it includes good or bad impact on animals, however I believe that ever living things have the right of living freely, it seems an illogical perspective at least we are capable of making better and make familiar zoos to the nature world
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different
views on zoos,
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some
of them believe that cities need an
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animal
park in terms of economic, amusement
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so
on, others claim that zoos
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destroyed
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animals
which
are taken
into zoos
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just
for their benefits, that has remained controversial issue,
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will compare and interpret over those sides

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keep
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animals
in zoos,
first
, the nature has a great deal of
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animals and
they inhabit in all corners of the world,
therefore
, zoos offer
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people
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get
to know
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animals
and
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meet
their curiosity,
for instance
, my city has
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an
zoo where
is located
in forest and a
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little
far from city, when
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i
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got
there
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i
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saw
may
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different
kinds of
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animals
,
consequently
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i
have
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several news
information about
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animals
duo to the zoo, second, it contributes to inject
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animals
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love
to our children
as well
as close looking a variety of wild
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animals
,
in addition
, children
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get
the grab of chance to broaden their horizon and
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improve
their way of thinking about
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animals
, last, it
also
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helps
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animals
which have wounds and
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deases
, and it feed local economic situation,
for example
, whoever visit any zoo they
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left
there money
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so
they can
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see
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them


On the other hand
, zoos have
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an
detrimental effect on wind
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animals
such as,
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make
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animal
cozy, lose their ability of surviving in the wild nature. Another issue is that opinion to build zoos open doors to
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men
who
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use
this opportunity to carry on
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animals
trafficking such as elephant teeth’s on account of
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given
permission to collect
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animals
for zoos,
in addition
, everything is
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beautiful
in where it belongs, zoos is against the
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animal
rights, it may take as torture to
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animals
to
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keep
them in cages. And
also
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men
of science has been telling, we
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have to
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keep
our distends from wild world in terms of preventing humans illness which conveys from
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animals
to
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people


In conclusion
, whether it includes
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good
or
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bad
impact on
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animals
,
however
I believe that ever living things have the right of living
freely
, it seems an illogical perspective at least we are capable of making better and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
familiar zoos to the nature world
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IELTS essay “Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. ”

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