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Some people believe that it is ok to put the needs of humans over environmental concerns. While others feel that protecting the environment should be prioritized. Discuss both views and what is your opinion?

Some people believe that it is ok to put the needs of humans over environmental concerns. While others feel that protecting the environment should be prioritized. jdbO8
Particular members of a society belives that safeguard our environment should be the topmost thing that we have to consider. And at the meantime, remaining folk says human requirement should be the top-notch thing over the environmental protection. In this essay, I would discuss the fundamental human needs and the preservation of the surroundings. Basic needs for humans are significant to lead a good life. It is one of the important factors to lead a healthy lifestyle. For example electricity, food and job are the few fundamental needs for humanity to survive in this world. Basic needs will also influence the nation's economic growth. Moreover, we can eradicate the poverty of the country if there is a proper supply of human needs in a community. So, the government should take some measures as well as they have to monitor the needs for the human to lead a better lifestyle. And then, protecting the environment should also be given equal importance. without the proper surrounding, we can't survive easily in this world. Because it will cause several health problems in human beings. for instance, oxygen rate in an environment is gradually decreasing in following decades so people were suffering to breathe because there is increase content of co2 in air, and then because of cut down of more tress. To overcome this situation we have to plant more trees and take care of our environment properly. In conclusion, to protect humans from a variety of diseases we should have a proper environment and to lead a better lifestyle we should focus on human requirements.
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consider. And at the meantime, remaining folk says
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requirement should be the top-notch thing over the environmental protection. In this essay, I would discuss the fundamental
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human
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needs
and the preservation of the surroundings.

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for
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humans
are significant to
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lead
a
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good
life. It is one of the
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important
factors to
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lead
a healthy lifestyle.
For example
electricity, food and job are the few fundamental
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needs
for humanity to survive in this world. Basic
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needs
will
also
influence the nation's economic growth.
Moreover
, we can eradicate the poverty of the country if there is a proper supply of
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human
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needs
in a community.
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So
, the
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government
should take
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some
measures
as well
as they
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have to
monitor the
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needs
for the
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human
to
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lead
a better lifestyle.

And then, protecting the
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environment
should
also
be
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given
equal importance.
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easily
in this world.
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Because
it will cause several health problems in
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human
beings.
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for
instance, oxygen rate in an
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environment
is
gradually
decreasing in following decades
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so
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people
were suffering to breathe
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because
there is increase content of co2 in air, and then
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because
of
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cut
down of more tress. To overcome this situation we
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have to
plant more trees and take care of our
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environment
properly
.

In conclusion
, to protect
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humans
from a variety of diseases we should have a proper
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environment
and to
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lead
a better lifestyle we should focus on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
requirements.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is ok to put the needs of humans over environmental concerns. While others feel that protecting the environment should be prioritized.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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