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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. pRJED
In this modern era, The information these days is widely and readily available. Knowledge is power if you can shared to someone then your knowledge should be increase But some people thinking that it is good way to much information sharing in scientific research, business as well as academic world. However, other believe that information is crucial part to society. In my perspective I believe both their have advantage and disadvantage. firstly, There are several types of information available in internet. We live an age where new invention happen almost every single days. sharing information is essential because its helps to given updates about invention happenings around us. Also, these research can be tell about technologies that can be used by people to ease lives for the betterment of the society. For instance, before last two month ago researchers was searches the medicines about corona virus and after two weeks they can found medicines and then researches was sharing information about medicines and they can telling about positive and negative impacts. Moreover, Sharing such useful inventions helps the society to be up to date with the recent procedures. secondly, sharing too much information can be dangerous for our society. For example, if you telling about how to make weapons and you can sharing details about weapons as well as nuclear bombs. If it s fallen into wrong hands it can be leads a war and tourist activity. likewise if you can share your business information about your earning then you can faced companies loss as well as decrease marketing values etc. In conclude, my opinions is neutral one. it is extremely important for the world to share knowledge regarding science and business but it is equally crucial to safeguard the information that is sensitive to companies and the country.
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information
these days is
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and
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available. Knowledge is power if you can
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shared
to someone then your knowledge should be increase
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some
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thinking that it is
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way
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to
much
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information
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sharing
in scientific research, business
as well
as academic world.
However
, other believe that
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information
is crucial part to
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society
. In my perspective I believe both their have advantage and disadvantage.
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firstly
, There are several types of
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information
available in internet. We
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live
an age where new invention happen almost every single days.
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sharing
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information
is essential
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because
its
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helps
to
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given
updates about invention happenings around us.
Also
, these research can be
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tell
about technologies that can be
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used
by
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people
to
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ease
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lives
for the betterment of the
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society
.
For instance
,
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before
last two month ago researchers was searches the medicines about
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corona virus
and after two weeks they can
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found
medicines and then researches was
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sharing
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information
about
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medicines and
they can
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telling
about
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positive
and
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negative
impacts.
Moreover
,
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Sharing
such useful inventions
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helps
the
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society
to be up to date with the recent procedures.
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secondly
,
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sharing
too much
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information
can be
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dangerous
for our
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society
.
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, if
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you telling
about how to
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make
weapons and you can
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sharing
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details
about weapons
as well
as nuclear bombs. If it s fallen into
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wrong
hands it can be leads a war and tourist activity.
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likewise
if you can share your business
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information
about your earning then you can
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faced
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companies
loss
as well
as decrease marketing values etc. In conclude, my opinions is neutral one.
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it
is
extremely
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important
for the world to share knowledge regarding science and business
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but
it is
equally
crucial to safeguard the
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information
that is
sensitive to
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companies
and the country.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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