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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. okOb3
Sharing information in our world has a strong influence on people. Some consider sharing information with people in scientific research, business, and the academic world while others deny it. This essay will discuss both the views on sharing information and my opinion with the same. In the field of academics when the information is shared by either the students or teachers helps in improvisation of the subjects, which helps in further development. For instance, when a student comes up with an idea to start a project, the information shared with his friends or teachers can help him with the improvement of the idea. Business grows with the sharing of ideas as many companies depend on the ideas shared by the employees for their growth. On the other hand, people believe that important or valuable information cannot be shared easily. For example, the data belonging to the more important government cannot be disclosed to everyone which may have an information brick, hence may affect the security of the nation. My friend’s father's business which was in good stands went to loss when he shared the success information with the media. To conclude, the sharing of information ought to be taken wisely. We need to decide on what kind of information can be shared or not.
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people
.
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consider
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sharing
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information
with
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people
in scientific research, business, and the academic world while others deny it. This essay will discuss both the views on
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sharing
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information
and my opinion with the same.

In the field of academics when the
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information
is
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shared
by either the students or teachers
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helps
in improvisation of the subjects, which
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helps
in
further
development.
For instance
, when a student
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comes
up with an
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idea
to
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start
a project, the
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information
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shared
with his friends or teachers can
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help
him with the improvement of the
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idea
. Business grows with the
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sharing
of
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ideas
as
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many
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companies
depend on the
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ideas
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shared
by the employees for their growth.

On the other hand
,
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people
believe that
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or valuable
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cannot be
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shared
easily
.
For example
, the data belonging to the more
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important
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government
cannot
be disclosed
to everyone which may have an
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information
brick,
hence
may affect the security of the nation. My friend’s father's business which was in
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good
stands went to loss when he
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shared
the success
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information
with the media.

To conclude
, the
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sharing
of
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information
ought to
be taken
wisely
. We need to decide on what kind of
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information
can be
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shared
or not.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
214 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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