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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. PQEg
In our modern society a number of people think that sharing some kind of confidential instruction (scientific research, Business) is beneficial to the society. And the other citizens believe that this kind of advice is valuable and it is restricted. In my view confidential information is sensitive as well as a number of people may misuse that data. Sharing knowledge is quite useful in some times on the contrary not all the ways. Spreading data means distributing secrets. For example, research scientist develop a particular algorithm, which used to control satellite. In this situation intelligence sharing gives encouragement to the young stars, and they can understand about the latest technologies. Despite that, some other hackers may destroy data and it leads to adverse impact to government. On the other hand, business instruction is more valuable because entire business will depend on that details only, and it leads to damage to the entire organization. For instance, a well known online shopping called Amazon, imagine if Jeff Bezos revile his business trade secrets than, what will be the position of his company? If he reviles business idea then I think he would not become world richest person. Because competitors are dramatically increasing day by day for his empire. That's why protecting instruction is more precious. There is no doubt in that word is powerful thing in the world. They must maintain secrets. Whereas, they need share about their creation beside that, it is useful to up coming generations. Overall, sharing intelligence is useful to the society but there is some types of drawback to them. I thought that sharing advice is fine. But it was not necessary to revile every detail of innovation.
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people
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think
that
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sharing
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some
kind of confidential instruction (scientific research,
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Business)
is beneficial to the society. And the other citizens believe that this kind of advice is valuable and it
is restricted
. In my view confidential information is sensitive
as well
as a number of
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people
may misuse that data.

Sharing knowledge is quite useful in
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some
times
on the contrary
not all the ways. Spreading data means distributing secrets.
For example
, research scientist develop a particular algorithm, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to control satellite. In this situation intelligence
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sharing
gives encouragement to the young stars, and they can understand about the latest technologies. Despite that,
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some
other hackers may
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destroy
data and it leads to adverse impact to
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government
.

On the other hand
,
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business
instruction is more valuable
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because
entire
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business
will depend on that
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details
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only
, and it leads to damage to the entire organization.
For instance
, a well known online shopping called Amazon, imagine if Jeff Bezos revile his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
trade secrets than, what will be the position of his
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company
? If he reviles
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business
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idea
then I
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think
he would not become world richest person.
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Because
competitors are
dramatically
increasing day by day for his empire. That's why protecting instruction is more precious.

There is no doubt in that word is powerful thing in the world. They
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must
maintain secrets. Whereas, they need share about their creation beside that, it is useful to up coming generations.

Overall
,
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sharing
intelligence is useful to the society
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but
there is
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some
types of drawback to them. I
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thought
that
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sharing
advice is fine.
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But
it was not necessary to revile every detail of innovation.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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