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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. BD6w
Sharing information is actual issue in our world where it has strong influence on people. There are various spheres of our life where information is more or less important for people working there on out of this. For this reason some people consider that it is good to share information while others think in opposite way. For example, practically all scientists are glade to share information within ordinary people or other scientist. There is no competition in this sphere. Sometimes it is bad for government which scientist share the secret information with international spy but it will not hurt information. There are simple rules in academic world which limite informational sources between people. If person is interested in theme discussion with you and you are ready to keep talking then the person gives you all information what he knows for free. On the other hand, if the person knows much and he knows that you can not give him actual or new information then he will share information with you just for money. For example, student pay for his learning while two students can cooperate and share information with each other. It is obviously that sharing information in business world can follows by releases. There is large competition and it may takes much costs for companies. Companies loose their profit every day because someone cannot keep silence especially IT companies. To sum up all above it is necessary to say that there are some spheres in which sharing information is a crime. In my opinion, in many cases information can be too important or sharing at all.
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is actual issue in our world where it has strong influence on
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people
. There are various spheres of our life where
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information
is more or less
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important
for
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people
working there on out of this.
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people
consider that it is
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to
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share
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information
while others
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think
in opposite way.

For example
,
practically
all scientists are glade to
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share
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information
within ordinary
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people
or
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other
scientist. There is no competition in this sphere.
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it is
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for
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government
which scientist
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share
the secret
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information
with international spy
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but
it will not hurt information.

There are simple
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rules
in academic world which
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limite
informational sources between
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people
. If person
is interested
in theme discussion with you and you are ready to
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keep
talking then the person gives you all
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information
what he knows for free. On the
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other
hand, if the person knows
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much and
he knows that you can not give him actual or new
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information
then he will
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share
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with you
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just
for money.
For example
, student pay for his learning while two students can cooperate and
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share
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information
with each
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other
. It is
obviously
that
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sharing
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information
in business world can follows by releases. There is large competition and it may
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much
costs for
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companies
.
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Companies
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loose
their profit every day
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because
someone cannot
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keep
silence
especially
IT
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companies
.

To sum up all above it is necessary to say that there are
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some
spheres in which
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sharing
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information
is a crime. In my opinion, in
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many
cases
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information
can be too
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important
or
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sharing
at all.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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4 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
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