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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific reasearch, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or to valueable to be shared freely

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific reasearch, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or to valueable to be shared freely 31aw
In the last century, the internet has been driving people’s habit to spread information widely especially in scientific research data, business, and academic fields. Although some support this argument, others believe that information should keep in secret because it is very urgent and priceless. In this essay, I will examine both views and explain why I argue that information in those fields should not access freely to support the sustainability of science. Those who advocate opening information access to the public believe that this view will bring benefits to a socialized society. This because not all people around the world have access to education and have a limitation of a mentor that can help them. In business, for instance, those persons able to collect important data to develop their business strategies through download from internet, about either scientific or study that approach to develop their small and medium enterprises. On the other hand, the opponent argues that specific data should not allow open access to the public without any payment. This is very important, because, some scientists take many years to discover a new approach to solve some specific problems, and they already spend much funding and dedicate their life just to pay attention to their research. Thus, people who need access should pay to help and reward the scientist. Daniel Kahnieman, for example, is a psychologist who conducts research about the different of human thinking for two decades, and he has written a book about that project and collect some royalties from this way. In conclusion, data access needs to open for the public because many people lack access, but others argue that information should secure and set for payment to collect. I personally believe that unfree access will make scientists still survive and fund their next project and continue their passion to discover new information to make science still exist in the world.
In the last century, the internet has been driving
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people’s
habit to spread
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information
widely
especially
in scientific research
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data
, business, and academic fields. Although
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some
support this argument, others believe that
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information
should
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keep
in secret
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because
it is
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very
urgent and priceless. In this essay, I will examine both views and
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explain
why I argue that
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information
in those fields should not
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access
freely
to support the sustainability of science.

Those who advocate opening
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information
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access
to the public believe that this view will bring benefits to a socialized society. This
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because
not all
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people
around the world have
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access
to education and have a limitation of a mentor that can
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help
them. In business,
for instance
, those persons able to collect
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important
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data
to develop their business strategies through download from internet, about either scientific or study that approach to develop their
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small
and medium enterprises.

On the other hand
, the opponent argues that specific
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data
should not
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allow
open
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access
to the public without any payment. This is
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very
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important
,
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because
,
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some
scientists take
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many
years to discover a new approach to solve
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some
specific problems, and they already spend much funding and dedicate their life
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just
to pay attention to their research.
Thus
,
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people
who need
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access
should pay to
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help
and reward the scientist. Daniel
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Kahnieman
,
for example
, is a psychologist who conducts research about the
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different
of human thinking for two decades, and he has written a book about that project and collect
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some
royalties from this way.

In conclusion
,
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data
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access
needs to open for the public
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because
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many
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people
lack
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,
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but
others argue that
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information
should secure and set for payment to collect. I
personally
believe that unfree
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access
will
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make
scientists
still
survive and fund their
next
project and continue their passion to discover new
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information
to
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make
science
still
exist in the world.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific reasearch, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or to valueable to be shared freely

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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