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some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.s

It is clear that our life always consists of many problems and bad things. While some people believe that those things can be acceptable, others argue that actions must be taken to raise such circumstances. In my opinion, people should try to overcome bad situations rather than accepting it. There are several reasons why people tend to accept unsatisfactory things. Firstly, lack of self-confidence plays an important role for this matter. Some people are not so good at study in that is why certain individuals find quite difficult to get a job. Those persons after getting a job think that they can not expect better jobs for their own and; therefore, try to survive with the remaining one. Secondly educational qualifications also a barrier for getting a desirable job. It is obvious that renowned companies always wants a qualified candidates. Because of this reason, a man who have a less qualification must do some sort of jobs that they might not happy with that. Finally, indolence somehow responsible for this issue. On the other hand, it will be foolery if someone do not try to find a best way to get rid of bad things. For instance, doing some sort of business has always profits and losses. If a person experiencing losses in his business, he should not drop out his ideas. while making some losses will teach him how to implement ideas for his business. By doing this, he will be able to find out best solutions which will increase his self-esteem. Furthermore, it also it will also help him to identify his mistakes. To sum up, it is important to analyse problems when facing bad situations and try to get best solution for it.
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that our life always consists of
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many
problems and
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bad
things. While
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some
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people
believe that those things can be acceptable, others argue that actions
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must
be taken
to raise such circumstances. In my opinion,
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people
should try to overcome
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bad
situations
rather
than accepting it.

There are several reasons why
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people
tend to accept unsatisfactory things.
Firstly
, lack of self-confidence plays an
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important
role for this matter.
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Some
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people
are not
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so
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good
at study in
that is
why certain individuals find quite difficult to
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get
a
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job
. Those persons after getting a
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job
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think
that they can not
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expect
better
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jobs
for their
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own
and;
therefore
, try to survive with the remaining one.
Secondly
educational qualifications
also
a barrier for getting a desirable
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job
. It is obvious that renowned
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companies
always wants
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a qualified candidates
.
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reason, a
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man
who have a less qualification
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do
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sort of
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jobs
that they might not happy with that.
Finally
, indolence somehow responsible for this issue.

On the other hand
, it will be foolery if someone
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do
not try to find
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a
best way to
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get
rid of
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bad
things.
For instance
, doing
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some
sort of business has always profits and losses. If a person experiencing losses in his business, he should not drop out his
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ideas
.
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while
making
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some
losses will teach him how to implement
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ideas
for his business. By doing this, he will be able to find
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out best
solutions which will increase his self-esteem.
Furthermore
, it
also
it will
also
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help
him to identify his mistakes.

To sum up, it is
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important
to
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analyse
problems when facing
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bad
situations and try to
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get best
solution for it.
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IELTS essay some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. s

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
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